Last week I went to visit to my former neighbor, Mr. Yang. He and I used to living next to each other for many years. About half a year ago, an order came which the old building, along with many other similar ones, were going to be pulled down to make room for a main street.
So I had to move apart. Mr. Yang now lives in the suburbs near a beautiful park. His new apartment is much big than before. The only problem is that it took quite a long time to get to the downtown area. Therefore, Mr. Yang doesn’t seem to worry about the long distance. He says that new subway line is to be built in a few year and he is sure life will be better in the future.
1.第一处：去掉第二个to visit作＂拜访，访问＂ 讲时，是及物动词。
2.第二处：living→ live used to do sth.意思是＂曾经做某事（但现在停止）＂ ；注意区分be used to (doing) sth.该短语意思是＂习惯于（做）某事＂。
3.第三处：which→ that that引导同位语从句，说明an order的内容。
4.第四处：were→ was 在从句中，主语the old building是单数，谓语动词仍用单数。注意along with不是并列连词，所以它引导的短语不能被看作并列成分。
5.第五处：I→ We 人称代词的逻辑错误。根据语境，这里指我们（我和住了多年的邻居）分开了。
6.第六处：big→ bigger than before提示上文应使用比较级。
7.第七处：took→ takes ＂去市区要花费相当长的时间＂是杨先生的现状，故表语从句也要使用一般现在时。
8.第八处：Therefore→ However 根据语境，上下文之间构成转折关系，并非因果关系，故应改为副词however。注意连词but通常不用逗号隔开。
9.第九处：that后加a new subway line前需加不定冠词a，泛指＂一条新的地铁线＂。
10.第十处：year→ years a few（一些）修饰可数名词复数。