Question

【题目】（二十二）

假设你将作为高三毕业生代表在毕业典礼上用英文作一简短的告别演讲，该演讲应包含以下要点:

1、荣幸有此机会演讲；

2、对高中生活的怀念；

3、对老师的感谢；

4、对未来的向往；

5、对母校的祝福。

注意：

1. 词数120 左右；

2. 开头语已为你写好；

3. 可以适当增加细节.以使行文连贯；

4. 文中不能出现考生真实姓名和学校名称。

参考词汇：毕业典礼graduation ceremony

My teachers and fellow students,

Answer 1

【答案】

My teachers and fellow students,

In a couple of weeks, we’ll say goodbye to our school. It’s my great honor to stand here to say a few words at this very graduation ceremony.

I will never forget the past three years, a wonderful journey with you, full of laughter and tears.To make the journey safe and fruitful, our great teachers contributed their time, energy, love and the whole heart. Here, we are extremely grateful for all that you, my dear teachers, have done for us.It’ll soon be the time for us to depart, though unwillingly. But it is not the end. It just means that we’re going to begin a new journey and we are very confident of our future.

Finally, on behalf of all the graduates present here, let me express our sincere wishes for our school and respectable teachers. Thank you!

【解析】

试题分析：考官评卷首先会根据文章的内容和语言判定作文所属的档次，然后从内容切题，语言表达准确、多样、连贯、得体，这几个方面评定分数。注意条理要清晰，逻辑顺序和结构要恰当，同时要尽量保持简洁精炼的内容，不拖泥带水。要注意题中所给的信息，不可偏题，应用文写作对于文章内容的要求是要达到写作目的。尽量保持卷面整洁，字体美观，注意行文的连贯性。时态：一般现在时。结构上：可采取总分模式。使用一些高级句型和词汇提升作文档次。

【亮点说明】It’s my great honor to 这是毕业典礼等正式公开场合通常都会有的恭敬语，往往是为了表现出演讲人的谦逊和对会议的尊重。其中it is 放在句首是形式主语。I will never forget the past three years, a wonderful journey with you, full of laughter and tears.中 a wonderful journey with you, full of laughter and tears都是前面那个小句的补语，这样写可以免去写成定语从句那样的复杂句，作为大会发言来说更清晰和生动。To make the journey safe and fruitful第三句将动词不定式的目的状语提前，符合英美国家写作规律。Here, we are extremely grateful for all that you, my dear teachers, have done for us.。这一句看似简单，但实际上却是一个定语从句。从句中 my dear teachers是you的同谓语，That的先行词为all。整句的意思是，这里，我们尤其感激对于亲爱的老师你们为我们做的事。It just means that we’re going to begin a new journey …这又是一个宾语从句。高级短语 be confident of 对…有信心，on behalf of 代表某人的（利益）使得文章等级提升。该范文体现出了题目中的所有要求，完成了写作目的。