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7．目前，就业形势越来越严峻．就业压力不仅是大学生无法回避的事实，也是高中生需要考虑的问题．就此你校编辑部开展了一次题为"就业危机对高中生的启示"的英语征文活动．请你根据以下提示，写一篇征文，阐明你的观点．
1、努力学习，拓宽知识面；
2、发展才能，提高个人素质；
3、加强合作精神，培养团队意识；
4、了解社会需求，做好人生规划；
5、你的观点…
注意：1、词数120左右；
2、可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3、文章开头已为你写好，不计入总词数；
What We High School Students Learn from the Job-hunting Crisis
As we all know，the employment situation is getting more serious now．Being high school students，what can we learn from it？
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Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．写作时首先要仔细审题，确定人称，时态，文体．内容要点要全面，上下段要使用连接词做到连贯．我们在写作中应当遵循语言表述的经济原则，即用尽可能少的形式表达尽可能多的语义内容，力求简洁精练．根据提纲的提示，写出所列要点，要全面．我们在用词上应该仔细揣摩，准确清晰地表达我们的思想，剔除冗词赘语，使文章言简意赅．
重点短语和句型：
more and more serious 越来越严重
to start with 首先
put one's heart into 全心投入
achieve one's goals 实现目标
cooperate with 合作
It is required that we should develop our abilities in many aspects and improve our personal qualities to achieve our goals in this highly competitive society．
句中it作形式主语，真正的主语是后面的that从句．
learning to cooperate with others is another thing we must do，for the sense of teamwork contributes to success more quickly．
句中learning to cooperate with others是动名词短语作主语；we must do修饰名词thing，是一个定语从句，省略了连词that；for连接原因状语从句．
we'd better set our long-term plans to meet what society demands．
句中meet后接what连接的宾语从句．
I think only by working hard can our ability be fully developed．
think后接的宾语从句中，only加状语提前，句子要部分倒装．

解答 What We High School Students Learn from the Job-hunting Crisis
     As we all know，the employment situation is getting more and more serious now．Being high school students，what can we learn from it？【提出问题】
     To start with，we should put all our heart into study to broaden our knowledge in various fields．It is required that we should develop our abilities in many aspects and improve our personal qualities to achieve our goals in this highly competitive society．（高分句型一） Additionally，learning to cooperate with others is another thing we must do，for the sense of teamwork contributes to success more quickly．（高分句型二）Last but not least，as young generation in China，we'd better set our long-term plans to meet what society demands．（高分句型三）【具体做法】
     At present，I think only by working hard can our ability be fully developed．（高分句型四） I'll spare no effort to study hard to accomplish my goal．【表达观点】

点评 书面表达题考查的是英语的应用能力．写作时要注意：要点的提炼要全；关键短语和句型要写对；过渡词和过渡短语要自然，通顺地道；最后还要注意人称和时态使用要正确．