Question

5．假如你是李华，你的英国笔友Bill来信询问你家乡是否有雾霾天气，情况如何．请按下面写一封E-mail：
（1）感谢他得关心；
（2）介绍情况：
①今年已经发生数次雾霾天气，学生放假，人们健康受到危害，交通受阻，事故增多等．
②人们已认识到雾霾天气的危害，正采取各种举措减少其发生．
③你自己为此做了什么或打算做什么．
注意：1．邮件的开头已给出；    2．词数：100左右；
参考词汇：雾霾 smog
Dear Bill，
I'm glad to receive your e-mail，
Thank you for your caring for the weather and my health．Now I'd like to tell you something about the smog．
Up to now，the smog has occurred a lot of times．It has done great harm to our daily life．（高分句型一）Many traffic accidents happened，and more and more serious diseases are caused by the smog．Students have to stay at home and their study is affected．
People have realized this and are taking measures to reduce the smog weather，such as burning less coal and using public transport．（高分句型二）
For me，I will go to school on foot，and I will try my best to protect the environment．Would you like to tell me some good ideas？I'm looking forward to your reply．
I'm looking forward to your reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 考查提纲式作文：以李华的名义给你的英国笔友Bill写信介绍雾霾（smog）天气的情况，考生首先要认真阅读前面的提示，认清写作要求和提纲之间的关系，这篇文章的提纲很详细，根据所给提纲，以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来，注意主次分明，详略得当．语言力求准确、简洁．根据情景的发展，按顺序安排好材料．同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性．考生必须认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等
【亮点说明】范文用了一些常见的短语：do great harm to"对…造成伤害"，for fear of"唯恐，害怕"，put off"推迟"，be supposed not to do不应该做…，looking forward to"渴望"，还有一些语法知识和句型：a great number of people have to stay at home for fear of the poisonous air caused by the smog．这句话用过去分词做定语，Fortunately，People have realized the great harm caused by the smog and the importance of protecting the environment．这句话用动名词做宾语，．Effective measures are being taken to reduce the smog weather．这句话用了现在进行时的被动语态，I will go to school by bike or on foot，I will tell whoever I meet to protect the environment as possible as they can．这句话用了whoever引导的宾语从句，还有范文用了What's worse，According to me，这样的关联词使文章更加连贯．

解答 Dear Bill，
    I'm glad to receive your e-mail．Thank you for your caring for the weather and my health．Now I'd like to tell you something about the smog．
    Up to now，the smog has occurred a lot of times．It has done great harm to our daily life．（高分句型一）Many traffic accidents happened，and more and more serious diseases are caused by the smog．Students have to stay at home and their study is affected．
    People have realized this and are taking measures to reduce the smog weather，such as burning less coal and using public transport．（高分句型二）
    For me，I will go to school on foot，and I will try my best to protect the environment．Would you like to tell me some good ideas？I'm looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                            Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                             Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．