Question

18．阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文．
Increased College Enrollment
In recent years，there is a steady increase in college enrollment．To many high-school students，it's definitely good news，for they would have better chance of receiving higher education．
You don't have to look very far to find out the advantages of the increased college enrollment．For one thing，it lessens the worries of both high school graduates and their parents．Besides，increased college enrollment can contribute to raise the educational level of our nation．What's more，increased college enrollment can provide more students with specialized knowledge，thus serving our development in a positive way．
On the other hand，we can not deny that there are some potential problems about increased college enrollment．To begin with，with the increased number of students，the shortage of teaching staff and facilities becomes clearly seen．Worst of all，increased college enrollment leads to increased competition in the job market．
It's not an easy task to tell whether the tendency should be encouraged．As to me，it's laudable to grant more students higher education．But a college degree is by no means a guarantee for a better job or future．To cast a promising career，we need a lot more abilities which we can not learn from college．
[写作内容]
1．以约30个词概括短文的要点；
2．然后用120个词写一篇文章，包括一下要点：
1）高校扩招的益处：
①缓解了父母和高中生们的心理压力；提高全国教育水平．
②培养更多有专长的人才．
2）扩招造成的一些问题：造成大学里师资和教学设施短缺；使就业市场竞争更加激烈．
3）我对大学扩招的看法
[写作要求]
1）文章可参照阅读材料的内容，但不要抄袭阅读材料中的句子；
2）不能出现真实姓名和学校名称；3）题目自定．
[评分标准]概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯．

Answer 1

分析 本文是读写任务型写作，这类作文可按照三段式模板写：第一段：概况所给短文要点．第二段：过渡词引出主题句---阐述理由．第三段：个人观点．特别要注意第一段的概括．用自己的语言概括，不能照搬照抄原文． 时态用一般现在时．人称用第一和第三人称． 重要短语：act as（充当，担任，担当），cultivate sb（培养某人），serve the society （服务社会），on the whole（ 总的来说，大体上），in favor of（支持），subscribe to （同意），relieve the high pressure（缓解压力），to some extent（在某种程度上），raise the educational level（提高教育水平），on the contrary （相反），be opposed to（反对做某事），lead to（导致），intensify the competition （加强，强化竞争），contribute to（促成），invest to do sth（投资做某事），guarantee sth （保证，确保某物）．
【高分句型一】
1．The college enrollment has risen steadily over the past years，which acts as a way to cultivate more well-educated people to serve the society．
此处是由关系代词"which"引导的非限制性定语从句，主句为"The college enrollment has risen steadily over the past years"．"which"在从句中作主语．
【高分句型二】
2．On the whole，increased college enrollment is just like a double-edged sword，which has both benefits and potential shortcomings．
此处是由关系代词"which"引导的非限制性定语从句，主句为"increased college enrollment is just like a double-edged sword"．"which"在从句中作主语．
【高分句型三】
3．People ①who are in favor of the increased enrollment rate subscribe to the view ②that it not only relieves the high pressure on parents and students to some extent，but is also a suitable tool to raise the educational level in our country．
①此处是由关系代词"who"引导的定语从句，先行词为"People"，关系代词"who"在从句中作主语．
 ②此处是由连接词"that"引导的同位语从句，解释说明名词"the view"的具体内容．
【高分句型四】
4．On the contrary，there are also some people①who are opposed to this policy，②because they fear③that it will lead to the shortage of teaching staff and educational facilities．
①此处是由关系代词"who"引导的定语从句，先行词为"some people"，关系代词"who"在从句中作主语．
②此处为连词"because"引导的原因状语从句．
③此处为连接词"that"引导的宾语从句．

解答 The college enrollment has risen steadily over the past years，which acts as a way to cultivate more well-educated people to serve the society．【高分句型一】However，people's opinions on it are divided．（概括）
On the whole，increased college enrollment is just like a double-edged sword，which has both benefits and potential shortcomings．【高分句型二】People who are in favor of the increased enrollment rate subscribe to the view that it not only relieves the high pressure on parents and students to some extent，but is also a suitable tool to raise the educational level in our country．【高分句型三】What's more，it can also help to cultivate more young labors with specialties．（高校扩招的益处）
     On the contrary，there are also some people who are opposed to this policy，because they fear that it will lead to the shortage of teaching staff and educational facilities．【高分句型四】Worse still，increased enrollment rate will intensify the already-fierce competition in job market．（扩招造成的一些问题）
    In my point of view，this tendency should be continued，as we need more capable people to contribute to the fast-growing economy．But in the meantime，the government and universities ought to invest more to guarantee the quality of education．（个人观点）

点评 读写任务型写作是将阅读与写作有机结合，要求考生既能读懂文章信息，又要依据要求规范连贯地表达内容，其中准确概括很有挑战且十分重要，根据记叙文、议论文、说明文等不同文体作相应概括，总的来说，遵循以下步骤：确定主题句；寻找关键词；重构主题句；重组支持句．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．