Question

15．假如你是李华，你的英国笔友Tom给你写信说他最近沉迷于吸烟，结果影响学习，作业不能及时完成，上课不能集中注意力，于是给你写信求助．请你用英语给他写一封建议信，为他停止吸烟提几条建议．
注意：1．词数100左右；2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Dear Tom，___________________________
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于开放类作文，根据提示信息用英语给Tom写一封建议信，为他停止吸烟提几条建议，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：吸烟的危害及几条建议． 2．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：be addicted to 对…上瘾； be harmful to对…有害；worse still 更糟的是； a waste of 浪费；therefore因此； in order to以便，为了As is well known to us all，smoking will be harmful to you in many ways．（高分句型一）To begin with，they will waste too much valuable time which should be spent on your study or other beneficial things．（高分句型二）
In order to live a meaningful life，you can read more good books，take more exercise to build you up or participate in some social activities to expand your horizons．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Tom，
     I felt very worried when I heard that you are addicted to smoking．As is well known to us all，smoking will be harmful to you in many ways．（高分句型一）To begin with，they will waste too much valuable time which should be spent on your study or other beneficial things．（高分句型二）In addition，smoking  will do harm to your health．Worse still，it is a waste of money to smoke a lot．Therefore，I strongly hope that you can break away from it．The earlier，the better．In order to live a meaningful life，you can read more good books，take more exercise to build you up or participate in some social activities to expand your horizons．（高分句型三）    Looking forward to your good news．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                        Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                        Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．