Question

17．根据下面提示写一篇短文
1．简述以下现象：
（1）健康之重要人尽皆知．
（2）许多青少年不注重健康问题，假期尤甚．长时间看电视，通宵上网聊天、玩游戏．导致的危害如：影响视力，身体虚弱，缺乏人际交往．
2．简述你的看法，提出你的建议．
要求：（1）内容完整，层次清楚，语言流畅．
（2）词数120左右，标题已给出，不计入总词数．参考词汇：交流communicate；心理健康 mental health
Have a healthy lifestyle
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Answer 1

分析 本文是提纲作文，根据所提供的材料信息，写一篇短文．简述青少年不重视健康的想象及危害，阐述自己的看法和建议．
写作要点：1开头-健康很重要．； 2．想象：①长时间看电视 ②通宵上网聊天、玩游戏；3．结尾-阐述观点，提出建议；
时态用一般现在时．人称以第一和第三人称为主．
重要短语：enjoy life（享受生活），pay attention to…（注意…），spend time doing（花费时间做某事），be bad for …（对…有坏处 ），get near-sighted（近视），lose the chance（失去平衡），face to face （面对面），have a bad effect on…（对…有怀影响），in one's opinion（某人认为），take some exercises（锻炼），have a healthy lifestyle（有健康的生活方式）．
【高分句型一】
1．Only when we are healthy can we study well and enjoy life．
此处是部分倒装结构，结构为"Only+【状语成分：介词短语/when、if引导的从句/时间副词】+一般疑问句形式"．
【高分句型二】
2．And they spend too much time watching TV，playing games and chatting on the Internet all night，which is bad for their health．
此处是由关系代词"which"引导的非限制性定语从句，"which"在从句中作主语，指代前面整个主句的内容．
【高分句型三】
3．Thirdly，they will lose the chance ③to communicate with others face to face ①as they never go out，②which may have a bad effect on their mental health．
①此处是由连词"as"引导的原因状语从句，"they will lose the chance to communicate with others face to face"为主句．
 ②此处是由关系代词"which"引导的非限制性定语从句，"which"在从句中作主语，指代前面整个主句的内容．
     ③此处是由不定式作名词"chance"的后置定语．

解答 As we all know，health is very important．Only when we are healthy can we study well and enjoy life．【高分句型一】（健康之重要）
However，many teenagers don't pay any attention to their health，especially during the holiday．And they spend too much time watching TV，playing games and chatting on the Internet all night，which is bad for their health．【高分句型二】（不注重健康）First，this may make them get near-sighted．Besides，their bodies become much weaker．Thirdly，they will lose the chance to communicate with others face to face as they never go out，which may have a bad effect on their mental health．【高分句型三】（不注重健康的危害）
In my opinion，they should spend less time in front of the TV or the computer．Go out to take some exercises，play some sports and visit some and have a healthy lifestyle．（简述看法，提出建议）

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．