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12．If you had billions of dollars，would you donate almost all of it to charity？Well that's what Mark Zuckerberg，CEO and founder of Facebook，just said he would do．Zuckerberg and his wife Priscilla Chan promised to give 99percent of their Facebook shares to society throughout their lifetime．Right now that is about $45billion （289billion yuan），and they plan to donate the money to things like science and education．Many billionaires in the West have done similar things．Bill Gates，creator of Microsoft，made The Giving Pledge，which is where billionaires promise to gradually give away more than half of their wealth to charities．
2．China's first Charity Law was passed on March 16，2016，with lawmakers hoping it can give donors confidence that they are helping the people who really need help．The new law，which will take effect in September，makes it easier for charity groups to raise money and carry out their activities"Charitable programs are indispensable for the fight against poverty．Formulating a charity law helps nongovernmental sources work together in taking targeted measures to eliminate poverty and contribute to achieving the goal of building a moderately prosperous society，"said Li Jianguo，vice chairman of the National People's Congress （NPC） Standing Committee．
3．"Charity"，which means providing aids to needy people，is becoming a popular word in China as the country struggles to reduce the gap between rich and poor．

【写作内容】
1．用约30个单词概述上述信息的主要内容；
2．用约120个词就慈善捐助谈谈你的想法，内容包括：
（1）慈善捐助对受惠人群会有哪些影响；
（2）你最想加入的慈善组织是哪一类（助学、济贫、关爱残疾人、…），理由是什么．
【写作要求】
1．写作过程中不能直接引用原文语句；
2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称；
3．不必写标题．
Actively involved in the charitable work，many western billionaires like Zuckerberg have won themselves much praise．Meanwhile，charity in China also enjoys a boom with the perfection of the relevant legal system．
Donors'unselfishness will make it easier for those in need to access good facilities and resources，making their future change for the better and fostering their sense of positive outlooks．In addition，the receivers will experience a high level of love and care and learn the virtue of being grateful，which will drive them to take responsibility for repaying the society．
Given a chance for charity，I would like to work for the children in the remote areas．Born in the underdeveloped country areas，most of them have to drop out of school due to poverty，leaving their compulsory education uncompleted．Our funding will cover their tuition and living costs，helping their life to get back on track．．

Answer 1

分析 本文属于读写任务写作，动笔前，一定要认真阅读原文，并理解内容．认真看清题目要求，这篇书面表达给了一段材料：先要求以约30个词概括上文的主要内容，要求有很高的概括提炼的能力，要抓住文章的主题，再以约120个词写一篇短文，按照要点去表达，不能有遗漏，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系．写作时尽量使用自己会的单词、词组和句型，同时也要注意使用一些高级语法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采．
亮点句型一：In addition，the receivers will experience a high level of love and care and learn the virtue of being grateful，which will drive them to take responsibility for repaying the society．此外，受教育者也会体验到高度的爱与关怀，学会感恩的美德，这将促使他们承担起回报社会的责任．这是一个非限制性定语从句，which指代前边整个句子的意思．
亮点句型二：Born in the underdeveloped country areas，most of them have to drop out of school due to poverty，leaving their compulsory education uncompleted．他们出生在不发达的农村地区，大部分由于贫困而辍学，义务教育未完成．本句中Born in the underdeveloped country areas是过去分词在句中作状语； leaving their compulsory education uncompleted是现在分词在句中做结果状语．分词在句中作状语主要看所给的动词与主句主语的关系，如果为被动关系则用过去分词，如果是主动关系则用现在分词在句中做状语．

解答 Actively involved in the charitable work，many western billionaires like Zuckerberg have won themselves much praise．Meanwhile，charity in China also enjoys a boom with the perfection of the relevant legal system．
      Donors'unselfishness will make it easier for those in need to access good facilities and resources，making their future change for the better and fostering their sense of positive outlooks．In addition，the receivers will experience a high level of love and care and learn the virtue of being grateful，which will drive them to take responsibility for repaying the society．（亮点句型一）
     Given a chance for charity，I would like to work for the children in the remote areas．Born in the underdeveloped country areas，most of them have to drop out of school due to poverty，leaving their compulsory education uncompleted．（亮点句型二）Our funding will cover their tuition and living costs，helping their life to get back on track．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．