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2．为了人民的健康，一些城市相继在公共场所实施了禁烟，然而与之不协调的是，越来越多的青少年正在加入烟民的行列．请根据以下提示写一篇短文，分析高中生吸烟现象，原因并呼吁高中生戒烟．
原因：1．认为吸烟很酷；
2．父母吸烟，树立了坏榜样；
3．受影视作品中吸烟人物的影响．
呼吁：吸烟一点都不酷，马上戒烟吧！
注意：1．词数100左右；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
More and more teenagers are smoking nowadays．Why do they enjoy smoking？The reasons for that are as follows．
First，most young smokers think smoking is cool and does no harm right now．Feeling curious，they would like to try smoking themselves．（高分句型一）Besides，some parents often smoke not only at home but also in public places，setting bad examples to their children．（高分句型二）Last but not least，some actors are often seen smoking in movies as well as in TV plays．Influenced by these films and TV plays，some teenagers believe that smoking helps make them more attractive and morelike adults．（高分句型三）
How foolish!As a matter of fact，smoking is not cool at all．What's worse，it does great harm to our health．So give it up now!．

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分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息 为了人民的健康，一些城市相继在公共场所实施了禁烟，然而与之不协调的是，越来越多的青少年正在加入烟民的行列．请根据以下提示写一篇短文，分析高中生吸烟现象，原因并呼吁高中生戒烟，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：原因：认为吸烟很酷；父母吸烟，树立了坏榜样；受影视作品中吸烟人物的影响．呼吁：吸烟一点都不酷，马上戒烟吧！2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：First首先；Besides另外；Last but not least最后同样最重要；not only    but also不仅，而且；As a matter of fact事实上；What's worse更糟的是；
Feeling curious，they would like to try smoking themselves．（高分句型一）
Besides，some parents often smoke not only at home but also in public places，setting bad examples to their children．（高分句型二）
Influenced by these films and TV plays，some teenagers believe that smoking helps make them more attractive and more like adults．（高分句型三）

解答 More and more teenagers are smoking nowadays．Why do they enjoy smoking？The reasons for that are as follows．
        First，most young smokers think smoking is cool and does no harm right now．Feeling curious，they would like to try smoking themselves．（高分句型一）Besides，some parents often smoke not only at home but also in public places，setting bad examples to their children．（高分句型二）Last but not least，some actors are often seen smoking in movies as well as in TV plays．Influenced by these films and TV plays，some teenagers believe that smoking helps make them more attractive and more like adults．（高分句型三）
       How foolish!As a matter of fact，smoking is not cool at all．What's worse，it does great harm to our health．So give it up now!

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