Question

17．假定你是李华，已经在今年的全国中学生英语演讲比赛中获得一等奖．在准备的参赛的过程中，曾得到过美国外教Mr．Smith的帮助．请你给Mr．Smith写信，要点包括：
1．完成比赛，已经获奖．
2．感谢他的帮助．
3．欢迎他再次来中国做客．
注意：
1．词数100左右
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
3．开头语和结束语已为你写出．
Dear Mr．Smith，
I'm Li Hua，your former student in China．I am writing to express my thanks to you for helping me improve my spoken English．（高分句型一）I have already finished my speech in the National English speech contest for middle school students．Thanks to your help，I have won the first prize in it and got so much unforgettable experience．（高分句型二）
I'm really grateful to you for your help，without which it would have been much more difficult for me．（高分句型三）I still remember the days when you taught me English．My English has been improved greatly because of your creative work．
If there is a chance，welcome to China，I am looking forward to your coming．
Best regards．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假定你是李华，已经在今年的全国中学生英语演讲比赛中获得一等奖．在准备的参赛的过程中，曾得到过美国外教Mr．Smith的帮助．请你给Mr．Smith写信，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：完成比赛，已经获奖．感谢他的帮助．欢迎他再次来中国做客． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：express my thanks to 想…表达感谢；Thanks to 幸亏，由于；be grateful to向…表示感谢；because of由于；look forward to 盼望
I am writing to express my thanks to you for helping me improve my spoken English．（高分句型一）
Thanks to your help，I have won the first prize in it and got so mu chunforgettable experience．（高分句型二）
I'm really grateful to you for your help，without which it would have been much more difficult for me．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Mr．Smith，
      I'm Li Hua，your former student in China．I am writing to express my thanks to you for helping me improve my spoken English．（高分句型一）I have already finished my speech in the National English speech contest for middle school students．Thanks to your help，I have won the first prize in it and got so mu chunforgettable experience．（高分句型二）
      I'm really grateful to you for your help，without which it would have been much more difficult for me．（高分句型三）I still remember the days when you taught me English．My English has been improved greatly because of your creative work．
      If there is a chance，welcome to China，I am looking forward to your coming．
      Best regards．
                                                                                                                                                                                                          Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                         Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．