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11．I always prided myself on being a wise shopper and having a good nose for bargains．So when I came across a sporting goods store with a sign"Going Out of Business Sale"，I marched into the crowded store．Up and down the aisles （通道），I wandered，humming to myself and enjoying the energy and excitement of a sale．
All of a sudden，there，at the back of the store sat a canoe（轻舟） exactly like my husband's dream Supremo Numero-Uno，whose picture had been stuck on the bathroom mirror for years．My heart beat wildly．I pushed my way through the crowds，and nearly fell into the canoe looking for the price tag．There it was，with the manufacturer's suggested price at﹩6，750 plus tax crossed out and a handwritten TO CLEAR﹩750 AS IS．Must be a mistake．﹩6000 off？Salesman．I had to talk to a salesman．I spotted a young fellow with a"Hi．I'm Mathew"．"Mathew．Tell me about this El Supremo canoe．What's wrong with it？Why is it only﹩750？"
"Oh．There's nothing wrong with it．It's brand new．We're closing the store．It's on clearance like everything else．I'll go check．"A few minutes later he came back and said，"I'm sorry ma'am．Someone made a mistake on the sale tag．It should be﹩4，750 for the whole package．"
I felt tears well up in my eyes．"Oh well"，I said sadly．"Of course，it was too good to be true．This is exactly like my husband's dreamboat．I guess I started to dream myself when I saw that price tag．He's going to be 62 years old Friday．H ad to retire early for his health．It's been hard on just the pension but the stubborn old fool has been saving﹩10 every week for years to buy one just like this．I promise I won't buy anything，but it's just an old man's silly dream，you know．Always said he wanted to fish in a canoe after he retired，"my voice lowered and I turned and walked away．

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I was already at the mall door when Mathew caught up with me．"Do you have﹩750 plus﹩25 for delivery，ma'am？"？""Yes．Yes．That's about all I have，""Well then，you just have your husband sitting at the front gate on Friday morning around 10 o'clock so he can be there when my Dad and I come to unload his new canoe．We'll even put a bow on it for his birthday．"I started to cry．My old hand shook as I wrote out my cheque．
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"Ma'am．There's something you should know．This store was my Grandpa's and the canoe had been ordered by him．He always promised to retire one day．Said he wanted to spend time relaxing and out fishing in a canoe．"He swallowed hard．"My Grandpa died，sudden-like，just last week．He was only 68 years old．I think he'd be mighty happy that your husband will get this canoe．You just have to make sure he uses it a lot，okay？Promise？""I promise，"I said as I dashed off to look for my dear sweet husband．
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Answer 1

分析 本文属于读写任务写作，动笔前，一定要认真阅读原文，并理解内容．认真看清题目要求，这篇书面表达给了一段材料：先要求以约30个词概括上文的主要内容，要求有很高的概括提炼的能力，要抓住文章的主题，再以约120个词写一篇短文，按照要点去表达，不能有遗漏，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系．写作时尽量使用自己会的单词、词组和句型，同时也要注意使用一些高级语法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采．
亮点句型一：you just have your husband sitting at the front gate on Friday morning around 10 o'clock so he can be there when my Dad and I come to unload his new canoe．你只要让你丈夫在星期五早上十点左右坐在前门上，等我爸爸和我来卸他的新独木舟时，他就能到了．have sb doing是一个固定结构，"have+sb．/sth．（宾语）+现在分词（宾语补足语）"意为"叫/让/使某人做某事或让某种情况发生"．宾语 sb．/sth．后面用现在分词作宾语补足语，表示宾语与现在分词表示的动作之间为主动关系，且动作正在进行．此句．so 引导的是一个结果状语从句，
亮点句型二：I think he'd be mighty happy that your husband will get this canoe．我想他会非常高兴你丈夫能得到这只独木舟．句子he'd be mighty happy that your husband will get this canoe，是一个宾语从句，在这个宾语从句中句子that your husband will get this canoe是形容词happy的宾语从句．

解答 I was already at the mall door when Mathew caught up with me．"Do you have 750plus25 for delivery，ma'am？""Yes．Yes．That's about all I have，""Well then，you just have your husband sitting at the front gate on Friday morning around 10 o'clock so he can be there when my Dad and I come to unload his new canoe．（亮点句型一）We'll even put a bow on it for his birthday．"I started to cry．My old hand shook as I wrote out my cheque．
"Ma'am．There's something you should know．This store was my Grandpa's and the canoe had been ordered by him．He always promised to retire one day．Said he wanted to spend time relaxing and out fishing in a canoe．"He swallowed hard．"My Grandpa died，sudden-like，just last week．He was only 68 years old．I think he'd be mighty happy that your husband will get this canoe．（亮点句型二）You just have to make sure he uses it a lot，okay？Promise？""I promise，"I said as I dashed off to look for my dear sweet husband．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．