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5．目前我校学生会提出倡议，为解决早晚上下学高峰时间校门口的拥堵问题，倡导使用低碳的交通方式．为此，学生会将举办"Let's Ride Bicycles"为主题的倡议活动．请撰写一份倡议书，主要内容包括：
1．目前，汽车带来的空气污染和家长开车接送上下学的弊端，如：校门口的拥堵和容易引起交通事故等问题．
2．骑自行车上学的益处，如环保、有利健康，培养独立能力等．
注意：
（1）对所给要点逐一陈述，适当发挥，不要简单翻译．
（2）词数150左右．
（3）作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名．
参考词汇：低碳生活（low-carbon life）节能（energy saving）
Good afternoon，everyone，
I am very glad to give a speech here．The topic of my speech is"Let's Ride Bicycles"．
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分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，给学生会撰写一份倡议书．为解决早晚上下学高峰时间门口的拥堵问题，倡导使用低碳的交通方式．写作时人称以第一人称和第三人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主．写作要点：1．介绍购物情况； 2．反映存在问题； 3．提出解决方案．重要短语：with the improvement of （随着…的发展），a popular means of （一个受欢迎的方式），bring great convenienceto …（给…带来便捷），causesome problems （引起问题），suchas （例如），be crowded with （挤满），solvethe problems （解决问题），in one's opinion （某人认为），environmentally friendly （环保的），be beneficial to（对…有益），be dependent on （依赖…），take on（呈现，承担，具有），take the responsibilityto（承担做某事），build up（建立，增强）．
【高分句型】
1．private cars have become a popular means of transport，bringing great convenience to our life．
这里是由现在分词作结果状语，逗号之前是private cars have become a popular means of transport，bringing great convenience to our life是现在分词作结果状语，主句的主语是private cars，与所给动词bring存在逻辑上的主动关系．
2．And every morning our school gate is always crowded with the cars of parents who drive their sons and daughter to school．
这里是由who引导的定语从句，先行词是parents，who drive their sons and daughter to school为定语从句，who在从句中作主语．

解答 Good afternoon，everyone，
Iam very glad to give a speech here．The topic of my speech is"Let's Ride Bicycles"．
As we all know，with the improvement of people's livingstandards，private cars have become a popular means of transport，bringinggreat convenience to our life．【高分句型】However，they have also caused some problems such as airpollution and traffic jams．And every morning our school gate is always crowded with the cars of parents who drive their sons and daughter to school．【高分句型】（目前，汽车带来的空气污染和家长开车接送上下学的弊端）
How can we solve the problems？In my opinion，riding bicyclesis a good solution．For one thing，bicycles are energy-saving and environmentally friendly．For another，riding bicycles is a good way for us toexercise and it is beneficial to ourhealth．【高分句型】What's more，riding toschool can also help us less dependent on our parents．（骑自行车的益处）
Ithink the commitment to environmental protection and energy saving is whateveryone should take on．Therefore； let's take the responsibility to build up alow carbon city by riding bicycles．Come on and join us!（总结）
Thank you!

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．