Question

9．假定你是学生李华．今年9月将赴美国进修学习4个月．请给你的美国笔友Peter写一封邮件，希望他能帮你找一个合租房．要点如下：
1．对房子的要求；2．对室友的要求；3．表达感谢．
注意：1．词数：100左右；2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．开头和结尾己为你写好，不计入总词数．
Dear Peter，
I am writing to ask a favor of you．This September，I am going to have a 4-month further study in the USA．I wonder if you could help me find proper accommodation．（高分句型一）
About the flat，can you find one with a kitchen？I am not quite used to the western food，so I would like to cook myself．Besides，Internet connection is a must．As you know，some assignments have to be submitted through the Internet．（高分句型二）
To lower the cost，I prefer to share the flat with a roommate，hopefully，a native English speaker so that I can practice my spoken English．（高分句型三）Also，I hope my roommate is friendly and easy-going．I would be grateful for your help．．
Looking forward to your early reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假定你是学生李华．今年9月将赴美国进修学习4个月．请给你的美国笔友Peter写一封邮件，希望他能帮你找一个合租房．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：对房子的要求；对室友的要求；表达感谢． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：be used to 习惯于；Besides另外；prefer to do更喜欢做；hopefully希望的是；be grateful for对…表示感谢；Look forward to盼望；
I wonder if you could help me find proper accommodation．（高分句型一）
As you know，some assignments have to be submitted through the Internet．（高分句型二）
To lower the cost，I prefer to share the flat with a roommate，hopefully，a native English speaker so that I can practice my spoken English．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Peter，
      I am writing to ask a favor of you．This September，I am going to have a 4-month further study in the USA．I wonder if you could help me find proper accommodation．（高分句型一）
      About the flat，can you find one with a kitchen？I am not quite used to the western food，so I would like to cook myself．Besides，Internet connection is a must．As you know，some assignments have to be submitted through the Internet．（高分句型二）
      To lower the cost，I prefer to share the flat with a roommate，hopefully，a native English speaker so that I can practice my spoken English．（高分句型三）Also，I hope my roommate is friendly and easy-going．I would be grateful for your help．
      Looking forward to your early reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                          Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                         Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．