Question

10．假设你是李华，临近高考了，你给初中英语老师Miss．Li写一封感谢信，内容要点如下：
1、感谢她给你的帮助；
2、你为高考做的准备；
3、你对大学的展望以及上大学后的打算．
注意：
1．词数100左右；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．开头已为你写好，但不计入总词数．
Dear Miss Li，
Long time no see．Thank you for your kind help with my study．Time flies，I am senior three now，…
                                     

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，给初中英语老师Miss．Li写一封感谢信．临近高考，感谢Miss．Li给自己的帮助，并告知老师自己为高考做的准备及打算．
写作时人称以第一人称和第三人称为主，时态以一般现在时和一般将来时为主．
写作要点：1．感谢她给你的帮助； 2．你为高考做的准备；3．你对大学的展望以及上大学后的打算．
重要短语：be devoted to （致力于…），learn much knowledge （学习很多知识…），promise sb sth （举行某事），be admitted into  （各种各样），dream university（为某事而设计…），good equipment（特殊场合），learned professors（从…到…），offer sb sth（获悉），be in difficulty（大饱眼福）．
【高分句型】
1．①Devoted to my study every day，I have learned much knowledge，②which will definitely promise me a good performance in my college entrance exams．
①此处是过去分词短语"Devoted to"作原因状语，主句为"I have learned much knowledge"，主句的主语为"I"与所给动词"devote"存在逻辑上的被动关系，固定短语"sb be devoted to do 某人致力于…"
②此处是由关系代词"which"引导的非限制性定语从句，先行词为"knowledge"，"which"在从句中作主语，指代前面先行词．
2．I hope that I can be admitted into my dream university，one with good equipment and learned professors，who can offer me guidance when I am in difficulty．
此处是由关系代词"who"引导的非限制性定语从句，先行词是"learned professors"，"who"在从句中作主语，指代前面的先行词．

解答 Dear Miss Li，
Long time no see．Thank you for your kind help with my study．Time flies，I am Senior Three now．（感谢她给你的帮助）
Devoted to my study every day，I have learned much knowledge，which will definitely promise me a good performance in my college entrance exams．【高分句型】I hope that I can be admitted into my dream university，one with good equipment and learned professors，who can offer me guidance when I am in difficulty．【高分句型】（你为高考做的准备） 
Of course，there will be exams in college to check my study．I won't bury myself in books the whole day．Instead，I'll be active and join many associations where I can develop my social skills and my potential．【高分句型】I firmly believe that only when I have a common ground can  I make my college life more colorful．【高分句型】（你对大学的展望以及上大学后的打算）

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．