Question

9．假如你是李华，美籍教师Susan 来你班任教一个多月了，她希望同学们对她的教学提出意见和建议．请你以下要点，用英文给她写一封建议信．内容包括：
1．讲课语速再慢点；
2．将西方文化与教学相结合；
3组织课外活动；
4 其他建议．
注意：
1．词数100左右．
2．适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．）
Dear Susan，
My classmates really appreciate your excellent teaching，butbut we think that you can make some improvement in some aspects．I am writing to offer you some advice．To begin with，I hope you can slow down a little bit when giving us a lecture because some students find it hard to keep up with you．Secondly，we will have a better understanding of the text if you can combine the learning material with some western culture．Furthermore，we expect to see some classic movies in the language lab after class in order to broaden our horizons．Finally，we hope you can organize the English Corner regularly to help us speak English，by which we can improve our spoken English quickly．
I believe you will consider my suggestions．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 （高分句型一）To begin with，I hope you can slow down a little bit when giving us a lecture because some students find it hard to keep up with you．
该句使用来when引导的时间状语从句；because引导的原因状语从句；还有find it adj．to do觉得做某事…
（高分句型二）we hope you can organize the English Corner regularly to help us speak English，by which we can improve our spoken English quickly．
该句使用which引导非限制性定语，在which之前加介词by，意思通过活动我们能提高口语；
高级词汇：keep up with  跟的上； have a better understanding of 对…有更好的理解；combine with和…结合；
过渡词：To begin with首先；Secondly其次；Furthermore而且；Finally最后；

解答 Dear_Susan，
     （首先表达感激之情）My classmates really appreciate your excellent teaching，but we think that you can make some improvement in some aspects．（给出适当建议）I am writing to offer you some advice．（高分句型一）To begin with，I hope you can slow down a little bit when giving us a lecture because some students find it hard to keep up with you．Secondly，we will have a better understanding of the text if you can combine the learning material with some western culture．Furthermore，we expect to see some classic movies in the language lab after class in order to broaden our horizons．Finally，（高分句型二）we hope you can organize the English Corner regularly to help us speak English，by which we can improve our spoken English quickly．
    I trust you will consider my suggestions．
Yours sincerely
Lihua

点评 书面表达的时态使用得当，概括文章所要求的全部要点，而且能够有效地使用语句之间的连接成分，所写内容连贯，结构紧凑，完全达到了预期的写作目的