Question

20．你是《21世纪英文报》（21st Century）的读者，也经常向该报投稿．她的《这就是生活》栏目（ That's Life）的下期话题是：
Farilure happens when you quit．To go on till you succeed is what life is all about．
该栏目编辑向你约稿，请你发表你的观点并陈述理由，字数100左右．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．作文主题明确，即"Farilure happens when you quit．To go on till you succeed is what life is all about"，根据所提供的材料信息，发表你的观点并陈述理由．
写作时人称以第一和第三人称为主，时态以一般现在时和一般过去时为主．
写作要点：1．发表自己的观点； 2．陈述理由；3．举例论证；4．结论．
重要短语：achieve goals（实现目标），not necessarily（未必），mean doing （意味着做某事），try hard to do （努力做某事），live a rich life（过着富裕的生活），rather than（而不是），give up（放弃），full of（充满），miss good opportunities（错失良机），in time（及时），drive ourselves into difficult situations（把自己推入困难的境地），bear sth in mind（记在脑海中）．
【高分句型一】
1  To succeed doesn't necessarily mean having much money or power；
此处是由不定式"To succeed"作主语，谓语动词为"doesn't necessarily mean"，宾语为"having much money or power"．
【高分句型二】
2．Take Robinson Cruse for example，if he had been the kind of person to give up without trying，he would have no chance of survival on the deserted island for 27 years．
此处是虚拟语气在条件状语从句中的运用，且是混合虚拟语气，从句中结构为"had+过去分词"表示过去，主句中的结构为"would+动词原形"表示现在．
【高分句型三】
 3．It was hope and perseverance that made his survival possible．
此处是强调句型，如果去掉强调句型的骨架"It was/is …that"，原句句子成分齐全，句意通顺

解答 My undersanding of life is to achieve goals，big or small，through efforts．To succeed doesn't necessarily mean having much money or power；【高分句型一】
 it means we try hard to live a rich life rather than give up easily．（观点）
 Life is sweet and full of chanllenges．If we give up too soon，we may miss good opportunities to arrive at our destination in time or even worse，we may drive ourselves into difficult situations．（理由）
Take Robinson Cruse for example，if he had been the kind of person to give up without trying，he would have no chance of survival on the deserted island for 27 years．【高分句型二】It was hope and perseverance that made his survival possible．（例证）【高分句型三】
So bear this in mind：failure happens when we quit and to go on till you succeed is what life is all about．（结论）

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．