Question

【题目】书面表达

请以“My best friend”为题，写一篇短文来介绍你的朋友May。词数在80字左右。要点如下：

1. 既是我最好的朋友又是邻居。在八年级，比我大。

2. 又高又苗条，一张圆脸，大大的会笑的眼睛使她看起来很友善。

3. 懂礼貌，学习勤奋，乐于助人。经常辅导同学功课；在公交车上让座给需要的人。

4. 喜欢阅读和打棒球，每周二次,放学后经常刻苦练习。

5. 长大后想成为……，我相信她……。

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Answer 1

【答案】

My best friend

I have a good friend. Her name is May. She is my friend as well as my neighbour. She is in Grade 8 and she is older than me. She is tall and slim with a round face. She has two big smiling eyes and looks friendly. She is polite and works hard. She is always ready to help others. She often help her classmates with their lessons. On the bus she often gives her seat to people in need. She likes reading and playing tennis. She often practices playing tennis after class every Tuesday. She wants to be a teacher when she grows up. I believe she is sure to realize her dream.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们根据题目中的提示，写一篇作文来介绍自己的朋友May，题目中给我们列出了写作的要点，我们需要将这些内容用正确的英语表达出来。介绍人物的文章是学生们比较熟悉的，教材上或者平时的练习中都有接触，因此写作所需要的词汇和句型，学生们积累比较多，写作时会比较容易。通过分析可知，这篇作文我们应主要使用一般现在时态，第三人称she来叙述，因此我们要特别注意谓语动词第三人称单数形式的变化，正确使用be动词的形式。可以将相近的要点加以归类，使作文更加有层次，结构更清晰。写作时，还应注意表达的流畅，使用一些句型和短语，还可以用一些连词，使文意连贯。

写作亮点：这是一篇优秀的作文，短文里作者给我们介绍了他的好朋友May的情况。作者写作时主要是根据题目中提示的要点进行翻译的，这样可以避免遗漏要点，但是会显得比较沉闷，没有变化。整篇短文里所使用的时态和人称都很正确，尤其是注意了谓语动词第三人称单数形式的变化，符合英语的表达规范。短文中形容词比较级、介词短语、连词的使用也很准确，表现出来扎实的基本功。作文里较好的句型有She is in Grade 8 and she is older than me.、She has two big smiling eyes and looks friendly.、She is always ready to help others、She often practices playing tennis after class every Tuesday.、he wants to be a teacher when she grows up等。