Question

请根据下面的英语提示写一篇60字左右的短文。

A man’s daughter is seriously ill and he has to rush her to the hospital. But on the way he injures an old lady seriously because of over speeding.

要求：1.请就该材料发表你的感想；

          2.应结合材料，有明确的观点；

                3.请在答题卡上作答。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

I must at first say this father is a responsible father but as a citizen of a society he is not a responsible driver: he only focuses on his own emergency based on the sacrifice of the others’ rights and benefits.

As a member of a society, one has many parts to play. But in my opinion, one should at first be the part that will not harm others on any condition or circumstance. So I think this man should be punished.

【解析】

试题分析：本文是一篇开放性作文。就这个话题，考生应该比较熟悉，写起来有话可说。但是要想用60左右的字把自己的感想和观点清晰地表达出来似乎还有较大的难度。所以写作时注意以下三点：一是开门见山直击话题；二是对这位父亲的行为不要全盘否定，要一分为二地看待；三是在谈自己的明确观点前，要有铺垫性的话语，也就是你给出观点的某些理由。如果就事论事地谈观点，那就显得很唐突，上下文不够连贯

【亮点说明】范文用两段82个字就把感想和观点说得清清楚楚，简洁明了，值得我们仿效。第一段在一分为二地评论这位父亲的行为以后还指出了这种错误行为的原因，为后面表达自己的观点作了第一次铺垫；第二段在讲自己的观点前，又接着第一段的叙述为讲自己的观点作了进一步的铺垫，使得观点的发表水到渠成。彰显了范文作者很强的逻辑思维能力。范文句式丰富多彩：短短82个字共5句话，其中主从复合句就用了3句。其余还用了简单句和并列句。像“I must at first say this father is a responsible father but as a citizen of a society he is not a responsible driver”这一句就含有宾语从句和并列句。这充分显示作者驾驭句子的能力。范文词汇的使用也很精彩：focuses on, based on, in my on any condition or circumstance.这些词汇的使用更是为文章增色不少。最后一句“So I think this man should be punished”更是画龙点睛之笔，作者的观点斩钉截铁，让读者一目了然。

考点：开放式(文字提纲式)作文