Question

20．假如你是美国某校高二学生刘凯，因为父母的原因不得不离开原来的学校，回中国学习．事发突然，没来得及跟班上的同学和老师当面道别．你决定在班级群里发贴．内容包括：
1．道歉并解释原因．
2．回顾高中生活，对老师和同学表达谢意．
注意：
1．词数100左右，可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
2．开头语和结束语已为你写好，不计入总词数．
3．文中不能出现真实姓名和学校．
Dear teachers and classmates，
I am so sorry for not saying good-bye to you，but I have to leave for China to study because of my parents'sudden job change．
Looking back on the past two years，I have so many beautiful memories．（高分句型一）I can still remember the first day I entered Senior High in America，I cried．What a shame!To my surprise，you didn't laugh at me．Instead，my deskmate told jokes to make me laugh．We soon became close friends and gradually I learned to be independent．At that time，it was really difficult for me to understand what the teachers said in class．（高分句型二）Thankfully，you-my teachers and classmates were always patient whenever I asked questions．（高分句型三）Never will I forget your kindness．
Best wishes!
Yours sincerely，
Liu Kai

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假如你是美国某校高二学生刘凯，因为父母的原因不得不离开原来的学校，回中国学习．事发突然，没来得及跟班上的同学和老师当面道别．你决定在班级群里发贴．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：道歉并解释原因；回顾高中生活，对老师和同学表达谢意．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：leave for前往；because of由于，因为；Look back on回顾；To my surprise令我惊讶的是；laugh at嘲笑；Thankfully充满感激的是；
Looking back on the past two years，I have so many beautiful memories．（高分句型一）
At that time，it was really difficult for me to understand what the teachers said in class．（高分句型二）
Thankfully，you-my teachers and classmates were always patient whenever I asked questions．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear teachers and classmates，
I am so sorry for not saying good-bye to you，but I have to leave for China to study because of my parents'sudden job change．
Looking back on the past two years，I have so many beautiful memories．（高分句型一）I can still remember the first day I entered Senior High in America，I cried．What a shame!To my surprise，you didn't laugh at me．Instead，my deskmate told jokes to make me laugh．We soon became close friends and gradually I learned to be independent．At that time，it was really difficult for me to understand what the teachers said in class．（高分句型二）Thankfully，you-my teachers and classmates were always patient whenever I asked questions．（高分句型三）Never will I forget your kindness．
Best wishes!
Yours sincerely，
Liu Kai

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．