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11．今天是七月八日，下午班级召开了以"我的梦想"为主题的班会活动，每位同学都畅所欲言，特别是介绍了自己的职业方面的梦想．请写一篇日记，记述班会情况及自己的感受．
内容要点：1．谈谈自己职业方面的梦想；
2．介绍有这个梦想的原因；
3．阐述如何实现自己的梦想．
注意：1．文章开头已经给出，不计入总词数．
2．词数要求：100字．
July 8^th                                                                     Sunny
All the students talked about their own dreamed jobs in the future in this class-meeting．                         

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息今天是七月八日，下午班级召开了以"我的梦想"为主题的班会活动，每位同学都畅所欲言，特别是介绍了自己的职业方面的梦想．请写一篇日记，记述班会情况及自己的感受．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：谈谈自己职业方面的梦想；介绍有这个梦想的原因；阐述如何实现自己的梦想．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明：come true 实现；sooner or later迟早；With the help of 在…的帮助之下；in the future在未来；Anyhow无论如何；meanwhile同时；Hopefully充满希望的是；
When I was in Grade Seven，I was sick and often went to see doctors．（高分句型一）
With the help of them，I was getting better．（高分句型二）
Anyhow，this class-meeting was indeed meaningful，meanwhile，I know that the dream I have calls for my efforts．（高分句型三）

解答 July 8th       Sunny
      All the students talked about their own dreamed jobs in the future in this class-meeting．We all believe that our dreams will come true sooner or later．
      I also talked about my own dream：to be a doctor．And the reasons are as follows．When I was in Grade Seven，I was sick and often went to see doctors．（高分句型一）The doctors were very friendly and they often cheered me up．With the help of them，I was getting better．（高分句型二）Now I'm very healthy．Since then I have hoped to become a doctor．How will I make my dream come true？I will study hard to get good grades．I'll read more books about medicine．I believe I'll be a good doctor in the future．
      Anyhow，this class-meeting was indeed meaningful，meanwhile，I know that the dream I have calls for my efforts．（高分句型三）Hopefully，I can make it．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．