Question

阅读下面短文，然后按要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
The officials in the White House and CIA (中央情报局)are rejecting Edward Snowden's beg for mercy. “Mr. Snowden has been against the U.S. law,” White House adviser Dan Pfeiffer said on Sunday about the former systems analyst who has turned fugitive (逃亡者) in Russia. “He should return to the US and face the justice and judgment, and there is no possibility for mercy and forgiveness.”
However, many people support Snowden and a sociology professor Svallfors in Sweden has recommended Snowden for the Nobel Peace Prize for his “heroic effort at great personal cost” disclosing the spying conducted by the National Security Agency of United States. He wrote, “Because of his bravery, Snowden helped to make the world a little bit better and safer”.
It may be too late for Snowden to receive the award this year, but the nomination should be taken seriously by the Nobel Prize committee for next year’s prize. If Snowden is awarded the prize in 2014, he would be the youngest Nobel Peace Winner in the history of the prize.
【写作内容】
1.以约30词概括上文的主要内容。
2.以约120词发表你对“Information Security”的看法，内容包括：
(1)简述信息安全的重要性；
(2)请举例说明信息安全事故的危害；
(3)谈谈如何维护信息安全。
【写作要求】
1.作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。
2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
【评分标准】
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。
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Answer 1

American officials refuse to forgive Edward Snowden because he is believed to have done harm to national security, but someone supports and recommends him for the Nobel Peace Prize for his courage.
We are now stepping into the Information Era in which security is becoming vital because it greatly affects many aspects like politics, commerce and our daily life. Thus, much emphasis must be placed on it，or a range of losses will be brought to us.
Take an experience of mine for example. Once my QQ was stolen by a hacker. Not only did he change the password, but also he pretended to be me and told my friends that I had got in trouble and been in urgent need of a large sum of money. My friends were worried and some hurriedly sent money into the hacker’s bank account. As a result, my friends were cheated due to information exposure and I felt rather sorry about that.
Therefore, it is high time that we did something to keep information secure. Personally, laws and regulations must be established. Besides, to improve technology is another solution. Meanwhile, we are supposed to raise the awareness of self-protection. Only in this way can we ensure our rights and interests.

试题分析：本文属于读写任务写作，动笔前，一定要认真阅读原文，并理解内容。认真看清题目要求，这篇书面表达给了一段材料：先要求以约30个词概括上文的主要内容，要求有很高的概括提炼的能力，要抓住文章的主题，再以约120个词写一篇短文，按照要点去表达，不能有遗漏，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。写作时尽量使用自己会的单词、词组和句型，同时也要注意使用一些高级语法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮点说明】文章简洁的总结了所给材料，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯，使用了词组：Take sth. for example拿…举例，in trouble“有困难”， in urgent need of 急切需要，As a result因此,due to由于，和句型： American officials refuse to forgive Edward Snowden because he is believed to have done harm to national security, but someone supports and recommends him for the Nobel Peace Prize for his courage.这句话用了固定句型，    We are now stepping into the Information Era in which security is becoming vital because it greatly affects many aspects like politics, commerce and our daily life. 这句话用了定语从句，Thus, much emphasis must be placed on it，or a range of losses will be brought to us.这句话用了被动语态， Not only did he change the password, but also he pretended to be me and told my friends that I had got in trouble and been in urgent need of a large sum of money. 这句话用了倒装句， it is high time that we did something to keep information secure.这句话用了虚拟语气， Only in this way can we ensure our rights and interests.这句话用了倒装句。还有范文使用了Therefore, Personally,Besides, Meanwhile,这样的词使文章更加连贯。