Question

10．假如你是李华，在伦敦做交换生，昨天你的室友Tony在校园摔倒后住院．请给校求助中心写封邮件，寻找帮助Tony的中国学生．
注意：1．词数100左右
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文流畅．
3．邮件的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
DearSir/MadamI am Li Hua，an exchange student from China．I am writing to ask you to look for a Chinese student．
Yesterday，my roommate Tony was on the way to the classroom when he fell down and could hardly move．Justat that moment，a Chinese girl came to him．She gave him first aid and called an ambulance．Thanks to the kind girl，Tony was sent to hospital in time．But the girl left quietly before Tony could express his thanks．The girl is about 18 years old and of medium height with short hair．Tony is eager to meet her to express his sincere thanks．Could you please help find her？
Looking forwards to your reply．
Yours，
Li Hua
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 考试在写作时需注意，由于该事件是发生在过去的，所以时态需用一般过去时．
（高分句型一）my roommate Tony was on the way to the classroom when he fell down and could hardly move．
该句使用了when引导的时间状语从句，意思是当…时候；
（高分句型二）But the girl left quietly before Tony could express his thanks．
before引导一个时间状语从句，意思是还没来得及；
高级词汇：on the way to 在去某个地方的路上； fall down 跌倒；Thanks to 幸亏；medium height 中等身材；be eager to 渴望做；

解答 Dear Sir/madam，
   I am Li Hua，an exchange student from China．I am writing to ask you to look for a Chinese student．
   Yesterday，（高分句型一）my roommate Tony was on the way to the classroom when he fell down and could hardly move．Just at that moment，a Chinese girl came to him．She gave him first aid and called an ambulance．Thanks to the kind girl，Tony was sent to hospital in time．（高分句型二）But the girl left quietly before Tony could express his thanks．The girl is about 18 years old and of medium height with short hair．Tony is eager to meet her to express his sincere thanks．Could you please help find her？
   Looking forwards to your reply．
                                                                               Yours，
                                                                               Li Hua

点评 该书面表达为提纲类，该类作文规定了考生的写作思路，写作时应注意紧密联系所给提示，用准确的语言，简洁明了的将文章表达清楚．