Question

11．假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文，请你修改你同桌写的以下作文．文中共有10处语言错误，每句中最多有两处．每处错误仅涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改．
增加：在缺词处加一个漏字符号（∧），并在其下面写上该加的词．
删除：把多余的词用斜线（\）划掉．
修改：在错词下面划一横线，并在该词下面写上修改后的词．
注意：
1．每处错误及其修改均仅限一词；
2．只允许修改l0处，多者（从第11处起）不计分．
Wang Dan，a quiet girl，is one that you can make friends．I got to know her three years before，when she was moved to the city with her parents．I still rem ember the afternoon that I first met her．She was working i n a shoe shop where I was a regularly customer．We then began to talk and I learned that we all studied in the same school．She took a part-time job in her spare time，hoped to be independent．Wang Dan gives me so much sunshines and makes me laugh so many．I have many friends here in the city，and never have I had a friend like her．

Answer 1

分析 本文主要讲述作者与WangDan相识的经历．同时，介绍WangDan在业余时间是里做兼职，总是给人以微笑，是一个易于交朋友的安静女孩．

解答 Wang Dan，a quiet girl，is one that you can make friends∧．I got to know her three years before，when she was moved to the city with her parents．I still remember the afternoon that I first met her．She was working i n a shoe shop where I was a regularly customer．We then began to talk and I learned that we all studied in the same school．She took a part-time job in her spare time，hoped to be independent．Wang Dan gives me so much sunshines and makes me laugh so many．I have many friends here in the city，and never have I had a friend like her．
1．加with 考查词语用法．make friends with sb意为"跟某人交朋友"，此处sb是WangDan，也就是先行词the one，所以一定要有介词with
2．before改为ago 考查副词．before是站在过去看过去，多和过去完成时连用，ago是站在现在看过去，多和一般过去时连用．
3．去掉was 考查动词语态．move是不及物动词，不能用于被动语态．
4．that改为when 考查定语从句．分析句子结构可知这是一个定语从句，先行词the afternoon指时间，在从句中作时间状语，用关系副词when．
5．regularly改为regular 考查形容词．customer是名词，其前用形容词作定语．
6．all改为both 考查代词．"两个人都"用both，all用于三者及以上．
7．hoped改为hoping 考查现在分词．she与hope之间是主谓关系，用现在分词短语hoping to be independent作伴随状语．
8．sunshines改为sunshine 考查名词．sunshine是不可数名词，没有复数形式．
9．many改为much 考查词语用法．so many只能修饰可数名词复数，不能修饰动词，要用much．
10．and改为but 考查连词．前后两个单句是转折关系，而非并列关系，用连词but．

点评 高考短文改错题的形式有说明文，短文故事，书信等，具有很强的实用性．短文的内容和语言都符合高中学生的实际，从表面上看类似一篇学生习作．首先，通读全文，了解短文大意，把握全篇的时态、人称及行文逻辑，在通读全文时把一些容易的错误先改好，再进行逐句改错．其次，要进行逐个句子的改错．这是要对文中的词法、句法和语篇着重分析和特别注意．最后把改好的短文再阅读一遍，检查答案是否正确，感觉是否还有不妥之处，最终形成定稿．