Question

7．阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英文短文．
Every morning，on his way to work，Mike passed an old man who was always at the same place with a cup in his hand hoping to get a bit of change from those who passed by．For most people，this person was someone to be ignored as if he didn't exist，someone who they didn't want to be bothered with．However，Mike would always say good morning to him and wish him a nice day and sometimes would drop a dollar or two in his cup．This behavior went on for several years until one day before retirement．
He told the man that he would no longer pass by because it was his last day on the job．The man took his hand and shook it warmly saying that he had always looked forward to seeing Mike not because he dropped a few dollars in his cup．He said he would miss him because he was one of the few people who said hello and bid him good day．The man also said that his warm words always brightened his day and helped him to continue．
We all have power of words and we often do not recognize that some can be devastating（毁灭性的） while some can be encouraging．
【写作内容】
1．以约30个词概括上文的主要内容；
2．然后以约120个词就言语的力量的话题发表你的看法，并包括以下要点：
（1）你对上文中Mike的做法持什么看法；
（2）谈谈日常生活中言语的力量；
（3）以你或他人的经历举例论证言语的力量．
【写作要求】
1．在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称．
【评分标准】
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型：
句型一：
I couldn't agree more （1）with what Mike did for the old man（2）．我非常赞成Mike为老人所做的一切．
（1）can't agree more非常赞成；该句型运用了"否定词+比较级"表示"最高级"．
（2）what Mike did for the old man 为介词with后接的宾语从句；从句往往是书面表达中的高分句型．
句型二：
It is necessary that（1）we should pay attention to what we say（2）since it is like a double-edged sword（2）．我们应该关注我们所说的话，既然它就像一把双刃剑．
（1）It is necessary that.."有必要…"，．往往用来表达作者的倡议，为it做形式主语，that引导的主语从句，从句中的动词为（should）+动词原形；
（2）what we say为介词to后接的宾语从句；
（3）a double-edged sword 双刃剑
句型三：
So depressed did I feel that（1）I did not feel like talking（2）to anyone at all．我觉得如此沮丧以致我不想与任何人说话．
（1）so…that表示"如此…以致"，其中so放在句首，句中用部分倒装；
（2）feel like doing想做…

解答 Every day Mike said hello and sometimes gave one dollar or two to an old man who was begging for a bit of change．His words encouraged the old man to continue his hard life．（30词概括）
I couldn't agree more with what Mike did for the old man【高分句型一】．Words have such great power that they can influence people greatly，either devastating or encouraging（我对Mike行为的看法）．
Words have magic power over people．A few warm words may brighten a day while just a hurtful sentence may leave a deep scar in a fragile heart．In our daily life，It is necessary that we should pay attention to what we say since it is like a double-edged sword【高分句型二】（日常生活中言语的力量）．
I also experienced the power of words．It was a time when I failed in the first exam at senior high school．So depressed did I feel that I did not feel like talking to anyone at all【高分句型三】．Yet after class my teacher Mr．Wang invited me to his office and said smilingly to me，"I hope you will not be defeated by temporary failure．Pick up your courage and prove that you are the best next time，will you？"All of a sudden，my world was brightened by his inspiring words．It seemed as if a stream of warmth flowed into my heart and instantly I was filled with energy and ambition to fight again．（举例论证言语的力量）

点评 写作时首先审题要到位：审体裁、人称和时态；审要点．其次要考虑高分词语和句型的选用，从句、非谓语动词、倒装、强调句型等都是可考虑的高级句型；词语和句型的选用要包含作者的感情色彩和增强表达的气势；再次，运用关联词如besides、what's  more、moreover、for one thing …for another等，使文字更加流畅．