Question

17．阅读下面短文，按要求用英语写一篇150词左右的短文．
Florence Chadwick was born in California in 1918．She grew up on the beach and began competing as a swimmer at the age of six，when her uncle entered her in a race．For the next 19years，she continued as a competitive swimmer．
On July 4，1952，at the age of 34，Chadwick attempted to become the first woman to swim 21miles across the Catalina Channel，from a port on the California coast．That day the ocean was ice cold，the fog was so thick that she could hardly see the support boats that followed her，and sharks swam around her．Several times，her support crew used guns to drive away the sharks．While Americans watched on televisions，her mother and her trainer，who were in one of the support boats，encouraged her to keep going．However，after 15hours and 55minutes，with only a half mile to go，she felt that she couldn't go on，and begged to be taken out of the water．
Later，Chadwick told a reporter，"Look，I'm not excusing myself，but if I had seen land I know，I could have made it．"The fog had made her unable to see her swimming goal，and it made her feel she was getting nowhere．Two months later，she tried again．Although the fog was still heavy，yet this time she made it with the goal rooted in her mind．She knew behind the fog was the land she pursued．
【写作内容】
1．以约30个词概括短文大意；
2．以约120个词就"Goal and Success"的主题谈谈你的看法，内容包括：
1）分析Chadwick第一次失败和第二次成功的原因；
2）Chadwick的故事对你有什么启发；
3）结合实际谈谈如何实现自己的目标．
【写作要求】
1．可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称．
Goal and Success
An American woman swimmer Chadwick succeeded in crossing the Catalina Channel after failing in her first attempt．It was a goal in her mind that enabled her to make it．（高分句型一）（30词）
Chadwick failed in her first attempt because she couldn't see the"land"（goal） due to the"fog"（difficulty）．But later，she succeeded because she had"the goal rooted in her mind"despite the heavy"fog"．
From the story，we know we should understand the relation between the goal and the difficulty．The goal can encourage us to work hard to achieve success while the difficulty may prevent us from reaching our goal．（高分句型二）However，we can achieve our goal by overcoming any possible difficulties．
As students，we may meet with many difficulties in our study，but we can surely overcome them if we have a clear goal．（高分句型三）I wish all of us could break through the"fog"to reach the beautiful"land"．（121词）．

Answer 1

分析 根据要求可知：整篇文章分为两部分：
第一部分：概括短文大意，一位美国女游泳者在她第一次尝试失败后成功地穿越了卡塔利娜海峡．
第二部分：
（1）分析Chadwick第一次失败和第二次成功的原因；失败是因为客观条件如天气寒冷、雾太厚，以及有鲨鱼等等．成功是因为她对自己树立了目标．
（2）Chadwick的故事对你有什么启发：我们应该处理好目标和困难之间的关系．
（3）结合实际谈谈如何实现自己的目标：遇到困难时必须要有明确的目标．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：succeed in doing成功的做成某事；due to由于；despite尽管；prevent  from 阻止；However然而；
It was a goal in her mind that enabled her to make it．（高分句型一）
The goal can encourage us to work hard to achieve success while the difficulty may prevent us from reaching our goal．（高分句型二）
As students，we may meet with many difficulties in our study，but we can surely overcome them if we have a clear goal．（高分句型三）

解答 Goal and Success
        An American woman swimmer Chadwick succeeded in crossing the Catalina Channel after failing in her first attempt．It was a goal in her mind that enabled her to make it．（高分句型一）（30词）
        Chadwick failed in her first attempt because she couldn't see the"land"（goal） due to the"fog"（difficulty）．But later，she succeeded because she had"the goal rooted in her mind"despite the heavy"fog"．
        From the story，we know we should understand the relation between the goal and the difficulty．The goal can encourage us to work hard to achieve success while the difficulty may prevent us from reaching our goal．（高分句型二）However，we can achieve our goal by overcoming any possible difficulties．
        As students，we may meet with many difficulties in our study，but we can surely overcome them if we have a clear goal．（高分句型三）I wish all of us could break through the"fog"to reach the beautiful"land"．（121词）

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．