Question

9．假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文，请你修改你同桌写的以下作文．文中共有10处语言错误，每句中最多有两处．错误涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改．
增加：在缺词处加一个漏词符号（/\），并在其下面写出该加的词．
删除：把多余的词用斜线（\）划掉．
修改：在错的词下划一横线（一），并在该词下面写出修改后的词．
注意：1．每处错误及修改均仅限一词； 2．只允许修改10处，多者（从第11处起）不计分．
During the last summer holiday，my parents and I paid visit to my grandparents by train．There was a large number of people and the train was crowded，but everyone helped those who had lots of baggages and behaved politely．Along the way，we chatted happily and enjoyed beautifully views．At first，we saw one hill after other．Then which came into view were fields with green crops．In a six-hour trip，we arrived at my grandparents'house．Tired as I felt，but I was happy to see my grandparents，whom I haven't seen for a long time．It was really an excited trip because it was the first time that I had taken such a long-distance train．

Answer 1

分析 本文主要讲述作者和父母乘火车去看望祖父母．在火车沿途上看到了一些美丽的风景，同时，也感受到了人们相互帮助的情景．

解答 During the last summer holiday，my parents and I paid∧visit to my grandparents by train．There was a large number of people and the train was crowded，but everyone helped those who had lots of baggages and behaved politely．Along the way，we chatted happily and enjoyed beautifully views．At first，we saw one hill after other．Then which came into view were fields with green crops．In a six-hour trip，we arrived at my grandparents'house．Tired as I felt，but I was happy to see my grandparents，whom I haven't seen for a long time．It was really an excited trip because it was the first time that I had taken such a long-distance train．
详解：
1．加a 考查固定搭配．pay a visit to意为"参观，拜访"，是固定搭配．
2．was改为were 考查主谓一致．在there be句型中，be动词的人称和数与be后的主语保持一致，此处主语是a large number of people，谓语用复数．
3．baggages改为baggage 考查名词．baggage是不可数名词，没有复数形式．
4．beautifully改为beautiful 考查形容词．views是名词，应用形容词修饰名词．
5．other改为another 考查固定搭配．one after another意为"一个接一个地"，是固定搭配．
6．which改为what 考查连词．此处应用what引导主语从句，表示"所…的事物"．
7．In改为After 考查介词．此处表示六个小时的旅程后，用after．
8．去掉but 考查连词．前后两个单句用一个连词连接，已有as连接，but是多余的，要去掉．
9．haven't改为hadn't 考查动词时态．从句的动作显然发生在主句动作之前，主句用了一般过去时，从句需要用过去完成时．
10．excited改为exciting 考查现在分词．此处修饰trip，故用exciting，表示"令人兴奋的"．

点评 高考短文改错题的形式有说明文，短文故事，书信等，具有很强的实用性．短文的内容和语言都符合高中学生的实际，从表面上看类似一篇学生习作．首先，通读全文，了解短文大意，把握全篇的时态、人称及行文逻辑，在通读全文时把一些容易的错误先改好，再进行逐句改错．其次，要进行逐个句子的改错．这是要对文中的词法、句法和语篇着重分析和特别注意．最后把改好的短文再阅读一遍，检查答案是否正确，感觉是否还有不妥之处，最终形成定稿．