Question

20．假设你是李华，一名高三学生，在网络上看到一所国外大学的招生信息 （admission information），该大学对中国学生开设30多个专业（major），你对此非常感兴趣，打算用英语撰写一份个人申请，主要内容包括：
1 想申请的专业；
2 个人优势；
3 进入大学后的设想．
注意：
1 词数100左右；
2 书信格式已给出，不计入总词数．

Dear Sir or Madam，
I have recently noticed the admission information of your university onthe Internet．I'm writing to apply for management among all the majors offered to us Chinese students．（想申请的专业）
For one thing，I do well in English and it will be easy for me to complete the coursesin your university．For another，I have been the monitor during my school years，which has promoted myorganizing ability．【高分句型】（个人优势）
Having organized a few school activities successfully，I'm determined to be amanager as my dream job．【高分句型】Therefore，my plan is to join theStudents'Union and participate in some meaningful social activities to learnsome advanced management experience．（进入大学后的设想）
I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，向对中国学生开设30多个专业的国外一所大学写一封申请书．写作要点包括：1．想申请的专业； 2．个人优势； 3．进入大学后的设想．时态以一般现在时为主．人称以第一人称和第三人称为主．重要短语：apply for…（申请…），offer sth to sb（给某人提供某物），do well in …（在…方面做得好），promote my organizingability （提升我的组织能力），be determined to do （下定决心做某事），participate in （参加），hear from sb（收到某人来信）．
【高分句型】
1．I have been the monitor during my school years，which has promoted my organizing ability．
这里是which引导的非限制性定语从句，which在从句中作主语，指代前面整个主句的内容．
2．Having organized a few school activities successfully，I'm determined to be a manager as my dream job．
这里是现在分词的完成式 Having organized 作原因状语，主句的主语是I与动词organize构成逻辑上的主动关系．

解答 Dear Sir or Madam，
        I have recently noticed the admission information of your university onthe Internet．I'm writing to apply for management among all the majors offered to us Chinese students．（想申请的专业）
        For one thing，I do well in English and it will be easy for me to complete the coursesin your university．For another，I have been the monitor during my school years，which has promoted myorganizing ability．【高分句型】（个人优势）
        Having organized a few school activities successfully，I'm determined to be amanager as my dream job．【高分句型】Therefore，my plan is to join theStudents'Union and participate in some meaningful social activities to learnsome advanced management experience．（进入大学后的设想）
        I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                           Yours Sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                              Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．