Question

Scientists find that hard-working people live longer than average men and women. Career women are healthier than housewives. Evidence shows that the jobless are in poorer health than the job-holders. A study shows that whenever the employment rate increases by 1%, the death rate decreases correspondingly(相应地) by 2%. All this comes down to one point: work is helpful to health.
Why is work good for health? It is because work keeps people busy, away from loneliness. Researches show that people feel unhappy, worried and lonely when they have nothing to do. Instead, the happiest are those who are busy. Work serves as a bridge between man and reality. By work, people come into contact with each other. By collective activities, they find friendship and warmth. This is helpful to health. The loss of work means the loss of everything. It affects man spiritually and makes him likely to disease.
Besides, work gives one a sense of fulfillment and a sense of achievement. Work makes one feel his value and status in society. When a writer finishes his writing or a teacher sees his students grow, they are happy beyond words.
[写作内容]
1.以约30个词概括短文的要点；
2.然后以约120个词就“努力学习，快乐生活”的主题发表看法，并包括如下要点：
(1)你赞同“努力学习也可以快乐生活”这一观点吗？简要阐述理由。
(2)举例说明你的同学是如何努力学习并保持健康乐观的心态的？
(3)简述如何才能做到努力学习并快乐生活？
[写作要求]
在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容但不得直接引用原文中
的句子；
2. 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
[评分标准] 概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。

Answer 1

Study hard and enjoy yourselves
The author highlights the effect of work on people’s health, because it can rid one of loneliness, and make one feel fruitful and proud of himself, which always contributes to a good body.
In common with the author, I agree that the harder you work, the happier you will be, as hard work can keep a person busy, give one a sense of achievement, and therefore he will be self-confident and feel happy.
Around me, some of my classmates work very hard, hoping to fulfill their dream. However, they don’t seem unhappy. Oppositely, they try to find fun even under the pressure of the NMET. For example, they may share the joy with others when working out a problem. Sometimes they may play a trick on his partner using the newly-learned idioms, thus refresh themselves quickly.
As for me, I think only when we truly experience what fun it is, can we spare no effort to study hard and meanwhile enjoy ourselves.

试题分析：题目要求用30个词概括短文大意，然后以“努力学习，快乐生活”为题，写一篇作文。作文可以分为三部分来写，第一部分赞同该观点并阐述理由；第二部分举例说明同学的做法；第三部分简述如何做到努力学习和快乐生活。使用第一人称进行写作，不要出现标点、拼写和时态错误。
【亮点说明】范文注意使用and therefore, However, Oppositely, For example, Sometimes, thus, and meanwhile等衔接上下文，使作文看起来行文流畅、语意连贯；
范文使用了一些重要语法知识：宾语从句I agree that the harder you work, the happier you will be；固定句型 the harder you work, the happier you will be；非谓语动词hoping to fulfill their dream，using the newly-learned idioms；倒装句式only when we truly experience what fun it is, can we spare no effort to study hard等，语法知识掌握扎实，重点语法知识的使用，使作文提高了等级；
范文还使用了一些短语和固定搭配：share the joy with others；working out；play a trick on；As for me等，使作文较为充实。