Question

4．请阅读下面文字及图表，并按照要求用英语写一篇150字左右的文章．

1．Hold fast to dreams For if dreams die life is a broken-winded bird That can never fly． Hold fast to dreams For when dreams go Life is a barren field From only with snow	2．Strong belief is everything in wishing．If you don't believe in your own power to make your wish come true，your wish will fly away，never to be seen again．If you're wishing for something possible，then it may be possible for you to do whatever you need to make it come true．The ultimate magic is not wishing，but doing．
3．Once a teacher received a paper from a boy where he described the dream of owning a 200-acrc horse ranch and a large house．He graded it with a red F，thinking it was an unrealistic dream．Though asked to change it （he boy stated，"You can keep the F and I'll keep my dream．"Many years later，the boy made it a reality．	■85% have a dream ■78% have a dream but give up ■7% have a dream and realize it

【写作内容】
1．用约30个单词概述上述信息的主要内容；
2．结合上述信息，简要阐述坚持梦想的重要性；
3．谈谈你的梦想，并分析实现梦想的必要要素（不少于两点）．
【写怍要求】
1．写作过程中不能直接引用原文语句；
2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称：
3．不必写标题．
【评分标准】
内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当．
Most people have a dream but those who make it a reality are few and far between．Therefore，what counts is to have the same determination as the boy did．（30字概括）
Life without a dream proves to be a frozen field．However，the dream turns out to be an empty slogan unless you devote the constant efforts to fulfilling it．（高分句型一）Nobody can achieve anything without persistence．Accordingly，one of the secret to success is holding fast to your dream whatever it happens．（高分句型二）
I have a dream that one day I can make a commitment to the education in the remote places where children are thirsty for knowledge．（高分句型三）I hope that my devotion will make a difference to their lives．To realize the dream not only should I equip myself with abundant knowledge but also inspire more people to join me in helping those poor children．（高分句型四）After all，many hands make light work．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于图表类作文，根据提示信息针对"梦想"的话题进行写作，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：分别从简要阐述坚持梦想的重要性和谈谈你的梦想，并分析实现梦想的必要要素方面来讨论该话题 2、图表是文章的总体框架，要在图表的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：Therefore因此；However然而；turn out to be 结果是；Accordingly相应的；are thirsty for渴望；make a difference to对…有影响；not only，but also而且；After all毕竟；
However，the dream turns out to be an empty slogan unless you devote the constant efforts to fulfilling it．（高分句型一）
Accordingly，one of the secret to success is holding fast to your dream whatever it happens．（高分句型二）
 I have a dream that one day I can make a commitment to the education in the remote places where children are thirsty for knowledge．（高分句型三）
To realize the dream not only should I equip myself with abundant knowledge but also inspire more people to join me in helping those poor children．（高分句型四）

解答 Most people have a dream but those who make it a reality are few and far between．Therefore，what counts is to have the same determination as the boy did．（30字概括）
        Life without a dream proves to be a frozen field．However，the dream turns out to be an empty slogan unless you devote the constant efforts to fulfilling it．（高分句型一）Nobody can achieve anything without persistence．Accordingly，one of the secret to success is holding fast to your dream whatever it happens．（高分句型二）
        I have a dream that one day I can make a commitment to the education in the remote places where children are thirsty for knowledge．（高分句型三）I hope that my devotion will make a difference to their lives．To realize the dream not only should I equip myself with abundant knowledge but also inspire more people to join me in helping those poor children．（高分句型四）After all，many hands make light work．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．