Question

11．假定你是李华，你的英国笔友Peter沉溺于网络游戏不能自拔，甚至不听父母劝阻想要离家出走．请根据以下要点提示，写信劝他放弃这个想法．
1．网瘾的危害；
2．要尊重父母并道歉；
3．建议他管理好自己的时间．
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Dear Peter，
I'm very sorry to hear that you have decided to leave home because of your conflict with your parents．（高分句型一）
I think it's unwise to make such a decision．Addicted to playing online games，you are not only wasting your valuable time but also hurting the feelings of your parents．（高分句型二）Your parents love you so much that they are trying every effort to make your life better．Therefore，wouldn't it be reasonable for you to respect them，have a talk with them and apologize？Meanwhile，you should manage your time more wisely and find some meaningful ways to spend your free time．（高分句型三）
I'm looking forward to your reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假定你是李华，你的英国笔友Peter沉溺于网络游戏不能自拔，甚至不听父母劝阻想要离家出走．请根据以下要点提示，写信劝他放弃这个想法．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：网瘾的危害；要尊重父母并道歉；建议他管理好自己的时间．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：because of 由于；make such a decision作出决定；Addicted to 沉迷于；try every effort to努力去做；Therefore因此；Meanwhile同时；look forward to盼望；
    I'm very sorry to hear that you have decided to leave home because of your conflict with your parents．（高分句型一）
  Addicted to playing online games，you are not only wasting your valuable time but also hurting the feelings of your parents．（高分句型二）
   Meanwhile，you should manage your time more wisely and find some meaningful ways to spend your free time．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Peter，
      I'm very sorry to hear that you have decided to leave home because of your conflict with your parents．（高分句型一）
      I think it's unwise to make such a decision．Addicted to playing online games，you are not only wasting your valuable time but also hurting the feelings of your parents．（高分句型二）Your parents love you so much that they are trying every effort to make your life better．Therefore，wouldn't it be reasonable for you to respect them，have a talk with them and apologize？Meanwhile，you should manage your time more wisely and find some meaningful ways to spend your free time．（高分句型三）     
       I'm looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                     Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．