Question

6．假定你是李华，你和父母在澳洲旅游期间于5月1日至2日入住Golden Bay Hotel酒店，但对其提供的服务不满意：1．搬运工送到房间的皮箱破损；2．卫生间漏水；3．楼下酒吧噪音持续到很晚，影响休息．请发电子邮件给酒店的管理者进行投诉，希望改进服务．
注意：1．文章必须包括所有要点．可适当增加细节，以使文章连贯．
2．词数100，文章开头结尾已给出，不计入总词数
3．参考词汇：搬运工porter； 漏水leak
Dear Manager，
My name is Li Hua．I stayed at your hotel，Golden Bay Hotel during my visit to Australia from May 1 to 2 with my parents．However，the service in your hotel left much to be desired．I'm writing this email to express my dissatisfaction．
First，we found our suitcases broken after they were carried to our room by one of your porters．（高分句型一）Second，water was leaking out of the toilet in the bathroom．Third，the noise from the bar downstairs went on so late into the night each night that we couldn't get good rest．（高分句型二）
For the above reasons，I have to say that the service in your hotel is of poor quality．Therefore，I would like to receive a written apology from you．Meanwhile，I hope you can improve your service in the future so that none of the above happens again．（高分句型三）
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲类作文，我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来．动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题．本作文中给出的要点比较具体，故需要准确表达．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化．平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果．
【亮点说明】范文中运用一些常见的短语express one's opinion表达某人的意见；would like to do 想要做某事；in the future在将来；For the above reasons，I have to say that the service in your hotel is of poor quality这个句子运用到be of 名词 的结构；Meanwhile，I hope you can improve your service in the future so that none of the above happens again这个句子so that表示结果；
First，we found our suitcases broken after they were carried to our room by one of your porters．（高分句型一）
Third，the noise from the bar downstairs went on so late into the night each night that we couldn't get good rest．（高分句型二）
Meanwhile，I hope you can improve your service in the future so that none of the above happens again．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Manager，
       My name is Li Hua．I stayed at your hotel，Golden Bay Hotel during my visit to Australia from May 1 to 2 with my parents．However，the service in your hotel left much to be desired．I'm writing this email to express my dissatisfaction．
       First，we found our suitcases broken after they were carried to our room by one of your porters．（高分句型一）Second，water was leaking out of the toilet in the bathroom．Third，the noise from the bar downstairs went on so late into the night each night that we couldn't get good rest．（高分句型二）
       For the above reasons，I have to say that the service in your hotel is of poor quality．Therefore，I would like to receive a written apology from you．Meanwhile，I hope you can improve your service in the future so that none of the above happens again．（高分句型三）
                                                                                                                                                                                         Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．