Question

假如你是李华，你的美国笔友Mike想了解你校开设的新课程《通用技术》的情况，你向他作如下的介绍：
这门课旨在提高学生的实际运用能力；
通过这门课的学习，你已经学会了修理、设计和制作一些物品；
你的感受。
注意：1、词数不少于100；2、开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数；
可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；4、通用技术--- General Technology
Dear Mike,
Thank you for your letter asking about the General Technology, a new course that
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Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Mike,
Thank you for your letter asking about the General Technology, a new course that we are taking at school. Here is something about it.
The new course aims to teach us students basic technical skills and improve our designing ability. From the course, I have learned to use various types of common tools safely. I can even repair some things that are broken in my house and community. What’s more, I can design and make an item that is useful in our daily life. We also have to attend a written test for the course before graduation.
In my opinion, we will benefit from such a practical course and we will acquire more knowledge in an interesting way. We enjoy it mainly because the course is closely related to our everyday life.

试题分析：这是一篇提纲类书面表达，文章的要点也基本上都给出来了，而且很具体，考生要把要点解释清楚，不能有遗漏。但是在写自己的感受的时候，要求考生自己发挥拓展，在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次。同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。因为是书信，所以本篇作文在写作时不要啰嗦，力求简洁。
【亮点说明】所给范文语言简洁，运用了好的词组和句子： aims to目的是，In my opinion在我看来, benefit from I can even repair some things that are broken in my house and community. I can design and make an item that is useful in our daily life. 这两句话用了定语从句， We enjoy it mainly because the course is closely related to our everyday life.这句话用了过去分词做定语。还有范文使用了What’s more,这样的词使文章更加连贯。