Question

20．Once，when I was a teenager，my father and I were standing in line to buy tickets for the circus （马戏）．Finally，there was only one family between us and the ticket counter．
   This family made a big impression on me．There were eight children，all probably under the age of twelve．You could tell they didn't have a lot of money．
   Their clothes were not expensive，but they were clean．The children were well-behaved，all of them standing in line，two-by-two behind their parents，holding hands．They were excitedly talking about the clowns，elephants，and other acts they would see that night with their brothers or sisters in a low voice．
   One could sense they had never been to the circus before．It promised to be highlight of their young lives．The father and mother were at the head of the pack，standing proud as could be．The mother was holding her husband's hand，looking up at him as if to say，"You are my knight in shining armor．"
   He was smiling and responding in pride，looking back at her as if to say，"You got that right．"The ticket lady asked the father how many tickets he wanted．He proudly responded，"Please let me buy eight children's tickets and two adult tickets so I can take my family to the circus．"
   The ticket lady gave the price．The man's wife let go of his hand，her head dropped，and his lips began to shake．The father leaned a little closer and asked，"How much did you say？"
   The ticket lady again quoted the price．The man didn't have enough money．
   How was he supposed to turn and tell his eight children that he didn't have enough money to take them to the circus？
   Actually we were not wealthy in any sense．So I understand how the kids would feel．I felt sorry for them．
注意：
1．所需写的短文词数应为150左右；
2．应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已经为你写好；
4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词．
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Seeing what was going on，my dad put his hand in his pocket，pulled out a $20 bill and dropped it on the ground．Then he picked it op and tapped the man on the shoulder and said，"Excuse me，sir，this fell out of your pocket．'The man turned around and saw the money．He knew what was going on，he looked straight into my dad's eyes，took my dad's hand in both of his，squeezed tightly onto the $20 bill，and with his lip shakingand a tear running down his cheek，he replied，"Thank you，thank you，sir．This really means a lot to me and my family．"
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That day my father and I went back to our car and drove home without any tickets．We didn't go to the circus that night，when I asked dad why he did so，Dad said，"My child，it was a desperate，heartbreaking and embarrassing situation for a father．Surely he wasn't begging for a handout，but he reminded me of my father，when I was young．"He paused for a while，as if wandering in his memory．"We should appreciate what we have obtained from life and seize every opportunity to help others．We didn't go to the circus tonight，but we didn't go without．"．

Answer 1

分析 写好这类作文要注意几个步骤：1． 认真审题，找准提示语中的关键词或句，确定中心思想．2． 依据关键句，草拟提纲，梳理文章的脉络3． 准确定位人称、时态．注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．4．最后还要认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等
高分句型一：
He knew what was going on，he looked straight into my dad's eyes，took my dad's hand in both of his，squeezed tightly onto the $20 bill
他知道发生了什么，他看着我父亲的眼睛，抓住我父亲的双手，挤进20美元．
高分句型二：
We should appreciate what we have obtained from life and seize every opportunity to help others．
我们应该感激我们所得到的生活，抓住每一个机会去帮助别人．

解答 One possible version
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  Then he picked it op and tapped the man on the shoulder and said，"Excuse me，sir，this fell out of your pocket．'The man turned around and saw the money．He knew what was going on，he looked straight into my dad's eyes，took my dad's hand in both of his，squeezed tightly onto the $20 bill（高分句型一），and with his lip shaking and a tear running down his cheek，he replied，"Thank you，thank you，sir．This really means a lot to me and my family．"
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   We didn't go to the circus that night，when I asked dad why he did so，Dad said，"My child，it was a desperate，heartbreaking and embarrassing situation for a father．Surely he wasn't begging for a handout，but he reminded me of my father，when I was young．"He paused for a while，as if wandering in his memory．"We should appreciate what we have obtained from life and seize every opportunity to help others（高分句型二）．We didn't go to the circus tonight，but we didn't go without．"

点评 开放性作文给出一定的写作主题，并此为基础进行思维和联想，自由发挥．不仅考查学生在内容、结构安排、语言运用和组织方面的能力，而且对学生的想像力、发散思维、归纳判断能力也有很高的要求．