Question

3．我们都热爱自己的母校，为自己是其中一员而自豪．但也许它在校园环境、课业负担、校服式样、课外活动、作息时间等诸多方面并不尽如人意．请你写一篇短文，谈谈母校存在的问题并提出合理化建议．
写作要求：
1．问题和建议至少两条
2．不必自拟标题
3．文中不得出现真实人名和地名
4．词数不少于80．
I love my school，I‘m proud of studying at the school．But I think thereare some problems．As we known，nowadays more and more attention is paid to campus safety，including bicycle theft，traffic accidents and students'getting injured in school．It is directly related to the healthy growth of young students and the happiness of millions of families．How to protect us students？
There are several ways．First，we should raise our safety awareness---to take care of ourselves in school．Second，traffic regulations must be observed．Besides，we should be more careful in taking physical exercise．Last but not least，we should always stay calm when having trouble with other students．We should solve the problem by communicating rather than quarrel and fight．
All teachers and students should make joint efforts to create a safe campus environment．．

Answer 1

分析 【高分句型一】
Last but not least，we should always stay calm when having trouble with other students最后也是最重要的，当我们和其他学生有不快的时候我们应该一直保持冷静．
 when having trouble with other students=when we have etrouble with other students省略句的使用．
【高分句型二】
We should solve the problem by communicating rather than quarrel and fight我们应该通过交流沟通解决问题而不是吵架．
rather than 而不是

解答 I love my school，I‘m proud of studying at the school．But I think there are  some problems．As we known，nowadays more and more attention is paid to campus safety，including bicycle theft，traffic accidents and students'getting injured in school．It is directly related to the healthy growth of young students and the happiness of millions of families．（问题） How to protect us students？
There are several ways．First，we should raise our safety awareness---to take care of ourselves in school．Second，traffic regulations must be observed．Besides，we should be more careful in taking physical exercise．Last but not least，we should always stay calm when having trouble with other students．【高分句型一】We should solve the problem by communicating rather than quarrel and fight．【高分句型二】（建议）
All teachers and students should make joint efforts to create a safe campus environment．

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