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16．假设你是李华，周末准备做一名兼职英语导游，父母担心会影响你的学业而不同意你的看法．你的英国朋友Jeff是一名兼职导游，请你根据以下要点给Jeff写一封信．
（1）表明写信目的；
（2）谈谈自己的问题及想法；
（3）希望得到Jeff的帮助．
注意：（1）词数100左右；
（2）可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
（3）信的开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数．
Dear Jeff，
How are you doing？I'm writing to you for some advice．I read a part-time job advertisement for an English tour guide in the newspaper．I think it's a good chance for me to practice my English and gain some working experience．（高分句型一）I told my parents about my plan，but they didn't agree with my idea．They thought the work would take up much of my time．（高分句型二）You also work as a part-time guide．Do you feel it tiring to work and study at the same time？Is it worth doing the two things and how do you balance them？（高分句型三）
I am looking forward to your reply．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息周末准备做一名兼职英语导游，父母担心会影响你的学业而不同意你的看法．你的英国朋友Jeff是一名兼职导游，请你根据以下要点给Jeff写一封信，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：（1）表明写信目的；（2）谈谈自己的问题及想法；（3）希望得到Jeff的帮助．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：agree with同意；take up 占据；at the same time同时；be worth doing值得做；
I think it's a good chance for me to practice my English and gain some working experience．（高分句型一）
They thought the work would take up much of my time．（高分句型二）
Is it worth doing the two things and how do you balance them？（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Jeff，
        How are you doing？I'm writing to you for some advice． I read a part-time job advertisement for an English tour guide in the newspaper．I think it's a good chance for me to practice my English and gain some working experience．（高分句型一）I told my parents about my plan，but they didn't agree with my idea．They thought the work would take up much of my time．（高分句型二）You also work as a part-time guide．Do you feel it tiring to work and study at the same time？Is it worth doing the two things and how do you balance them？（高分句型三）
        I am looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                  Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                        Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．