Question

前不久，你校举行了一场以“My Dream”为主题的班会活动。请你根据以下所提供的信息写一篇英语短文。
内容要点：
1．简述两位同学的梦想及理由；
2．你的未来“梦想”是什么；
3．谈谈你的想法。
注意：
1．词数120左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，使行文连贯；
3．开头部分已为你写好，不计入总词数。
My Dream
 As is shown in the table, my classmates’ dreams vary considerably.
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Answer 1

My dream
As is shown in the table, my classmate’s dream vary considerably. Li long, whose mother is a music teacher, has a gift for music and is fond of singing and dancing. As a devoted fan of Singer Song Zuying, she wants to be a singer when growing up. As for Wu Dong , he is not only strong but also good at sports. He likes playing basketball, running and so on. His dream is to become a national athlete.
Personally , I dream of becoming a doctor in the future. It’s a virtue to cure the wounded and rescue the dying. Doctors are always respected and admired by people. Furthermore, I’m good at biology , chemistry and so on ,which will lay a solid foundation for becoming a qualified doctor.
In my opinion, people may gain what they dream of after hard work.

试题分析：本篇书面表达中心话题是我的梦想，此话题贴近生活，学生们有话可说，但是在写作时一定要注意审题，不要跑题，要按要点提示去完成写作任务，在理解my dream这句话的基础上，提出自己对梦想的看法，以及如何去实现梦想。此外，在句型句式上要尽量有所变化，可以使用非谓语，倒装句等，不要使句式过于单一。在语言表达上要适当使用插入语，连接词等以使上下文语义连贯流畅，同时也使文章有层次感，有条理性。
【亮点说明】范文中提到一些常见短语has a gift for有什么样的天赋； is fond of 喜爱；As for 至于；It’s a virtue to do 做某事是一种美德； In my opinion在我看来。. Li long, whose mother is a music teacher, has a gift for music and is fond of singing and dancing.这个句子中whose引导非限制性定语从句。As for Wu Dong , he is not only strong but also good at sports这个句子中用到not only but also连接两个并列表语。Furthermore, I’m good at biology , chemistry and so on ,which will lay a solid foundation for becoming a qualified doctor.这个句子中which引导非限制性定语从句，代指这件事。