Question

请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。
You can never succeed if you don’t give it a try.
注意：
①无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；
②除诗歌外，文体不限；
③文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；
④词数为120左右。

Answer 1

Everybody wants to be successful. But only a few people take action immediately when they want to do something.
Whenever I saw my friends swim, I would admire them. How I wished I could swim like them! But I couldn’t seem to learn how. It frightened me just to think of being alone in the water. My father encouraged me to learn from my friends. He said, “ How do you know you can’t if you never give it a try? Nobody is born knowing how to swim.” I realized I needed to do something, and began to practice swimming on weekends. My father taught me, and showed me there was nothing to be afraid of. Two months later, I could swim.
This experience has also taught me that as long as I never give up and keep trying, I can succeed.

试题分析：考查开放性作文写作,开放性作文给出了一个话题，并有部分的文字提示。给考生自由发挥的余地较大。对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。在完成开放性作文时，首先要选择自己熟悉的短语或者句型，在你的能力范围之内，选择句式时要赋予变化，因为这样你才可以更好的驾驭。同时也要选择合适的连接词，把各个要点组织成一个完整的整体，如besides, further, last but not least等。在发表个人观点的时候，可以使用谚语来提升整个文章的档次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性。
【亮点说明】文章使用了很好的短语和句子：take action采取行动，encourage …to do… 鼓励某人做什么How I wished I could swim like them! 这句话用了虚拟语气， It frightened me just to think of being alone in the water. 这句话用了it做形式主语， Nobody is born knowing how to swim.” 这句话用了伴随状语， there was nothing to be afraid of. 这句话用了there be句型。This experience has also taught me that as long as I never give up and keep trying, I can succeed.这句话用了宾语从句和条件状语从句。