Question

目前青少年压力过大，为排解压力一些青少年染上了一些恶习，如吸烟，饮酒、吃垃圾食品、上网成瘾等，请你以学生会的名义参照以下提示用英语写一封倡议书，呼吁中学生要“养成好习惯，过健康生活”。要点如下：
1．青少年中存在的恶习以及它们的危害。（恶习和危害各至少2点）
2．好习惯的重要性和必要性。（至少2点）
3. 呼吁你校学生养成好习惯，过健康生活。
注意：
1. 词数120左右，开头语已为你写好, 其词数不计入总数；
2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3. 文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称。

Answer 1

Dear students,
In the present world, we teenagers are living under great stress. As a result, in order to relieve the stress, some of us have developed bad habits, such as smoking and drinking, which are not only bad for our health but also can do harm to our society. Besides, some students prefer junk food, causing weight problem（obesity). What’s worse, some are even addicted to the net at the cost of their studies and future.
Facing such serious situations, we’ll have to get rid of band habits and form good ones, which is necessary and urgent. As we know, doing sports, reading , living positively are all good habits and only by forming good habits can we be happy and make achievements. It is well-known that it is good habits that lead many people to succeed.
Dear follow students, let’s take action right now and keep physically and mentally healthy and form good habits . I believe they will benefit us all our lives!
That’s all . Thank you !

试题分析：本次写作任务是就“养成好习惯，过健康生活”这个话题写一封倡议书，属于议论文写作。考生要先审清题目要求，确定好作文人称、时态、写作要点、段落等基本内容。本文是应用文中常见的倡议书。话题是呼吁中学生要“养成好习惯，健康过生活”。有很强的可写性，文章的要点也基本上都给出来了，但只是一个提纲，内容有：1. 青少年中存在的恶习以及它们的危害。2. 好习惯的重要性和必要性。3. 呼吁你校学生养成好习惯，过健康生活。除了基本的要点，考生还需要做适当的发挥。明确作文的基本内容后，就是选用准确的词汇和恰当的句子来表达。在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，让文章更有文采。同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如： Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。
【亮点说明】范文观点明确，有理有据，不乏好的短语和句子：be addicted to 对…上瘾，at the cost of以…为代价，take action采取行动。As a result, in order to relieve the stress, some of us have developed bad habits, such as smoking and drinking, which are not only bad for our health but also can do harm to our society. 这句话用了非限制性定语从句，some students prefer junk food, causing weight problem（obesity). 这句话用了现在分词做状语， Facing such serious situations, we’ll have to get rid of band habits and form good ones, which is necessary and urgent. 这句话用了过去分词做状语和非限制性定语从句，As we know, doing sports, reading , living positively are all good hanbits and only by forming good habits can we be happy and make achievements.这句话用了非限制性定语从句和倒装句， It is well-known that it is good habits that lead many people to succeed.这句话用了it做形式主语。还有范文还使用了：Besides, What’s worse,这样的关联词使文章更加连贯。