Question

假如你叫李华，你的笔友John来信告诉你他想成为一名职业(professional)足球运动员，并询问你未来想从事的职业（dream job），请给他回一封邮件。
要点:  1. 你想从事的职业及原因。
2. 为了实现梦想你在做哪些努力。
3. 其他想和他交流的内容。
Dear John,
I’m so pleased to receive your last letter.                                    
                                       
                                       
                                       
                                       
                                       
                                       
                                       
                                       
                                       
                                       
                                       
                                       
Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear John,
I’m so pleased to receive your last letter. I felt excited to know you dreamed of becoming a professional football player. I’m looking forward to seeing a international football star, John.
As for me, teaching is my dream job because I would like to share my knowledge with my students and help them solve problems. Besides, the school’s environment appeals to me and staying with students helps to keep me young and alive. To realize my dream, I have to make full use of spare time to acquire the essential knowledge and enter a normal university. What efforts are you making for your dream and who is your favorite football player?
Yours,
Li Hua

试题分析：本篇书面表达是要求写封电子邮件，告诉笔友John你的梦想的职业。电子邮件是人们日常生活中常用的一种应用文体，同学们应该对写作格式很熟悉，但是在写作时要注意以下方面：一. 因为是书信，所以要求语言简洁，条理清楚，把要点交代清楚；二. 要点只是一个提纲，不能就提纲翻译，适当增加细节，内容应该有所充实；三. 时态方面，要结合不同的语言环境使用不同的时态。四. 注意关联词的使用，使语言更为通顺，行文更为连贯。
【亮点说明】范文包括题目中的要点，有适当的发挥，表达的时候善于使用短语和句式：dream of “梦想”look forward to “盼望”， As for “至于”，appeal to“吸引”，make full use of “充分利用”To realize my dream, I have to to acquire the essential knowledge and enter a normal university.这句话用了不定式做目的状语，还有文中使用 Besides使文章更加连贯。