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12．假如你叫孙维，在去年夏令营认识的一个朋友Jim从英国给你寄来一件礼物------一件红色的衬衫，并附有一封信．在信中他向你问好，他想知道你近来在忙些什么．请你给他写一封回信表示感谢．回信要包括以下内容：
（1）向Jim问好并对他表示感谢．
（2）礼物是你最喜欢的颜色，尺寸很合适，你非常喜欢．
（3）告诉Jim你近来很好，上周刚过完生日，生日聚会很热闹．
（4）询问Jim近况，并表示希望他能来中国．
注意：（1）词数：100--120个词左右；
（2）可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Dear Jim
First of all，thanks for your present，and I like this red shirt very much．Red is my favorate color，and its size is exact．I think this shirt fits me well．Thank you again!Recently，I am fine．Last week，I held a birthday party，and it's very wonderful．There are so many friends in my party that I feel happy．（高分句型一）It's a very unforgettable party．
How is it gong with you？There is no denying that China is a very great country with a long history，and it's beautiful．（高分句型二）I hope you can come to China．If you come，I will treat you well．
Best wishes!
Yours，
Sun Wei．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息在去年夏令营认识的一个朋友Jim从英国给你寄来一件礼物------一件红色的衬衫，并附有一封信．在信中他向你问好，他想知道你近来在忙些什么．请你给他写一封回信表示感谢，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：（1）向Jim问好并对他表示感谢．（2）礼物是你最喜欢的颜色，尺寸很合适，你非常喜欢．（3）告诉Jim你近来很好，上周刚过完生日，生日聚会很热闹．（4）询问Jim近况，并表示希望他能来中国． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：First of all首先；Recently最近；There is no denying that…不可否认；
There are so many friends in my party that I feel happy．（高分句型一）
There is no denying that China is a very great country with a long history，and it's beautiful．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear Jim，
      First of all，thanks for your present，and I like this red shirt very much．Red is my favorate color，and its size is exact．I think this shirt fits me well．Thank you again!Recently，I am fine．Last week，I held a birthday party，and it's very wonderful．There are so many friends in my party that I feel happy．（高分句型一）It's a very unforgettable party．
      How is it gong with you？There is no denying that China is a very great country with a long history，and it's beautiful．（高分句型二）I hope you can come to China．If you come，I will treat you well．
      Best wishes!
                                                                                                                                                                                                                     Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                   Sun Wei

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．