Question

5．•假如你是李华曾经是一名失学儿童，你有幸得到在中国工作的Mr Brown的资助，可以重返校园．你给Mr．Brown写了一封信，内容如下：
★收到钱和书后能重返校园，非常感激；
★在老师的帮助下，学习有了很大的进步，受到老师的表扬和鼓励；
★决心更加努力学习，取得更大的进步；
★盼望见到Mr．Brown，希望他寄来一张照片．
注意：书信应包括以上所有要点，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯
Dear Mr．Brown．
I am writing to express my deepest thanks for the money and books you sent me．I could not have returned to school without your help．（高分句型一）Thank you so much．
I have been working hard since I went back to school．I have made great progress in my studies with the help of my teachers．They often praise me and encourage me．But for your help，I might have left school and couldn't have got such a good education．（高分句型二）I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress．（高分句型三）
How are you getting on with your life and work？I would like to meet you in person，but I have no opportunity to do so．Would you please send me a photo of yourself？
Thank you again for your generous help and best wishes!
Yours Sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假如你是李华曾经是一名失学儿童，你有幸得到在中国工作的Mr Brown的资助，可以重返校园．你给Mr．Brown写了一封信，内容如下，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：★收到钱和书后能重返校园，非常感激；★在老师的帮助下，学习有了很大的进步，受到老师的表扬和鼓励；★决心更加努力学习，取得更大的进步；★盼望见到Mr．Brown，希望他寄来一张照片．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：make great progress取得巨大进步；But for若不是；make up  mind to do下定决心去做某事；get on with与…相处；进展；in person亲自；
I could not have returned to school without your help．（高分句型一）
But for your help，I might have left school and couldn't have got such a good education．（高分句型二）
I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Mr．Brown，
       I am writing to express my deepest thanks for the money and books you sent me．I could not have returned to school without your help．（高分句型一）Thank you so much．
       I have been working hard since I went back to school．I have made great progress in my studies with the help of my teachers．They often praise me and encourage me．But for your help，I might have left school and couldn't have got such a good education．（高分句型二）I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress．（高分句型三）
       How are you getting on with your life and work？I would like to meet you in person，but I have no opportunity to do so．Would you please send me a photo of yourself？
       Thank you again for your generous help and best wishes!
                                                                                               Yours Sincerely，
                                                                                                LiHua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．